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Stars

Slowly seeping silver,
forging silken chains
that bond the earth
to waiting sky,

Amongst the fire-white stars,
moonlight fans and flames
these silent peacocks of the sky,

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  • poppa
    July 7

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    some lovely imagery Rose, arent they such a beautiful phenomenon


  • zoev
    July 5

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    Shooting stars.... very nice. The imagery is beautiful, and the poem comes across as the collection of thoughts, very well done I enjoyed reading it.