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Sun Shines Darkly

Sunshine cuts its swathe through an unwelcoming open door 
The breeze blows dust stirs
Scant resistance to its new master.

A clock ticks a tap drips
A floor creeks a door squeaks
A spider’s ambivalent. 

A sea-shell smashed its shore
Far away
No sea to echo forever.

A paintings slashed
Its wall unknowing 
A mirror cracked reflections fragmented.

Clothes torn
Odors of times forgotten
Aspirations dashed
Fear has won.

Sun Shines Darkly.


S. Marshall 03/07/09

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    July 5

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Darkly rich I enjoyed the flow of imagery that comes from your ink - the second stanza is my favourite

    I hope you enjoy AllPoetry and continue to share your words with us
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  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    July 5

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    Welcome To Allpoetry

    This is a very dark poem and that must be why I like it so much, because I have a knack for the darker writing! Nicely written, poet!
    Welcome to AllPoetry! I hope you have fun writing and reading poems on this site!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy
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