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Heartbeat


Breathing,
yet breathless
under your mouth.
Tongue moving
in and out…
In and out
between my lips.

Hips,
heaving upward,
begging you release.
My female core
throbs and throbs…
Throbs and throbs
just like my heart.

Body
becoming light,
floating, as hands move
up and down…
Up and down
stroking my nakedness.

I am getting closer.
Closer
and closer
than I have ever been…

Just like you,
with my every heartbeat,
step by step
and step for step,
come further
and deeper
into me

Your heaven…
My heaven…

Oh my god!



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  • Awesome

    It flows really well, and seems very passionate


  • sheltered
    July 8
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    Like this...
    the rhythmic build up
    rocks