asi go to sleep at night.
i see your face in my dream.
as i try to reach for you,but yet your so far away.
as i sleep at night in my dream.
i start to cry,but you say it's okay andeverything well be fine.
than i look again but your not there.
now i know what is gone from my dreams and it is you.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I agree with Manda that having the words run into each other tends to interrupt reading - but other than that this is a great poem
well done on a wonderful start here!
Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!
Polly
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thank u yes i do have to watch when i write things down.and thank u for welcoming me to this sight.i appreciate the comments on my writing so i know what im doing wrong
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Beautifully sad; there is a sense of loss and pain that tugs at the heartstrings as I read You may like to edit the spacing a little with some of the words coupling up 
Wonderful poem
I hope you enjoy AllPoetry and continue to share your words with us
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Stay safe
~Manda
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thank u
its about my husband who passed away in 2000 at a young age
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