i saw a new girl today, just walking around,
she had a light on her face, like she had just been found.
She had long red hair, and these shinning brown eyes,
she walked lightly, as if she were free from lies.
She had a beauty about her, i can not explain,
an extraordinary beauty in a way so plain.
She made everyone look twice, they couldn't help but stare,
but she just smiled and waved, she really didn't care.
She wasn't afraid, she was proud of who she was,
a small giggle to herself, she understood the buzz.
until today she had never been "enough",
so on the dream she had finally given up.
She let down her guard and decided just to "be",
who is this girl? why, she's me.
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im trying to see myself as beautiful, im hoping that this well help.
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Human redemptive
this is such a lovely poem
we are human beings not human thinkings or human doings so we really need to learn to just be
this makes me warm in my tummy and smile, this really is a beautiful poem so full of hope not just for you but im so happy that you found your moment of being
now go and write more x x x x -
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i just adore your comments
they are always just want i want or need to hear
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this is outstanding, i love the way its so personal, it means everyone can feel something with it, i know i do!
youre an amazing writte (:
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Way too Cool
I'm a guy, yet I could feel a lot of hidden meaning as if it could apply to anyone. Perhaps we all need to look with different perceptions at ourselves.
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Such liberty in your lines....Keep being who you are ....and penning....We need your poetic voice!
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Opp's, I made a whoopsie!
Sorry about that...pushed the wrong button again!
To continue...I thought "Beautiful Girl" was a marvelous self appreciation that one seldom sees, but obviously well deserved. I wish I had had that type of confidence when I was younger. the flow was superb and after only the first few lines, I realized you were writing about yourself, after having read your profile. No rephrasing or suggestion required, its perfect. I loved it, I loved the last line, and I'm sure that all who know you, love you too. Thank you for sharing this gem.
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thank you so much for your sweet comment
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Marvolous.
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very good
when I was reading this poem I just had a feeling it was you... great write
p.s. hope you are feeling better
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thanks
and i really am
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Love this poem...truly love it!
And from your picture, you are physically beautiful, but more important, I know you are gorgeous on the INSIDE...physical beauty fades, but internal beauty can always grow...and have you ever noticed someone who might seem ordinary in a photograph, but in person, they somehow seem lit from within, exuding a glow a confidence a compassion a charisma that is beautiful? Wonderful write poet!
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i hope you realize how much your comment means to me. it totally, 100% made me happy.
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Wow, I like this! It sounds like a swift breeze of confidence. It's good to be proud of who you are, theres nothing like it. ALWAYS be proud of you. No matter what.
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thank you so much its definitly something im working on!
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