Evolution of itself was nothing new
Even Saint Augustine knew a thing or two
But the genius of Darwin was to see
How evolution tied the birds to you and me
He observed that nature's built on massive waste
Instead of on resources nicely placed
The future fate of life makes clever use
Of the fact you have to thrive to reproduce
It was obvious to all (save zealous fools)
That life must always follow certain rules
But the rule that all had missed before his day
Was that most of life is always thrown away
If you haven't got the time to have a child
Then you can't affect the species in the wild
As a baby may inherit father's nose
Other species do the same you should suppose
He researched and worked it out for many years
But couldn't see the way past other's fears
As he knew the ignorant would never see
The Bible wasn't written literally
Gregor Mendel's work though older was unknown
Inheritance has rules as he had shown
Darwin studied pigeon breeders for the clues
Of the tricks that Mother Nature ought to use.
On his travels he observed some fossil bones
And he saw how species changed across wide zones
How a finch could change to fill in every niche
That no other birds had had the luck to reach
Now we see that how it works is DNA
And that species just reflect the genes at play
All of life is somewhere on the fam'ly tree
And that cactus is a relative of me!
A contest entry
- Prewrites with Conditions by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended October 27, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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Nice One
Makes a nice change from your evergreen ubiquitous "Moon pours white wine" extravaganza Jeff although I'm not a Darwin fan ( see my "Darwins Chair") I must admit it is well written with your usual good rhyming
and smooth imagery Well Done and Good Luck in the contest....George
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I'm glad you entered this in this contest because I missed it. Wonderfully written, interesting ideas albeit a bit misguided.
Love,
Amera♥
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Quite an interesting read. Not sure I agree with all of it, but this was definitely unique and cleverly written. Nice to see a fresh perspective. Thanks so much for entering my contest. It’s an honor read your fine work!
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Clever ...
but I'm not sure I like the idea of being related to a cactus since I'm prickly enough now.
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hiccup....okay
poetically good.
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V3 l1 - tsk tsk tsk!
v2 l4 is eugenics, not evolution, and not how evolution is supposed to work.
Nicely wrought.
You know what I think you ought to be doing.
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v2 l4 in not eugenics! May is not permission, but ability, on the other hand it is bending the mechanism a bit, but I couldn't work out how to fit "those more aptly suited to their environment have a higher than average chance to reproduce" into the meter.
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"eu" = Greek prefix for "best", and evolution is more hit-and-miss than "best suited..." It throws up organisms which have adapted very nicely to a particular random condition, but are bloody useless at other things. Nature is a very odd thing, if you look at it.
Still a good pome though.
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I definitely agree with Sue cardwell's comment. Such an intelligent and wonderfully rhymed write. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for entering this.
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Oh my, Is that why you can be a bit prickly at times? ... just joking
An excellent synopsis of Darwin's life and theory.
All the best in the contest
Sue
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nicely done
Passions
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