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Drained Hope

The dark, ungracious night

shedding no light

reminds me of your eyes

the way you looked at me 

When I couldn't 

keep up with your strides

Forward.

Stuck backward

I silently plead.

The harsh wind

remind me of how

you ignored me. 

The rustling leaves

remind me

of how you whispered

your sweet, deadly goodbye 

Soft raindrops

remind me of

how I cried for you 

The night, sweeping away

reminds me of

how you left me

Swiftly, without a glance back 

The merciless rain now

Battering me

Drenching me

Washing out all hope 

I break with the dawn.

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  • Word poet
    October 15

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    As this poem went on I got the idea that it was about you and someone that you were angery with. if there is one thing I would change about this poem its not a big change but you might want to look out for it. At the end it could of been alot more emtional it would of made it alot better but even if you don't its real good. again you did a good job


    • Cookie Jam
      October 22
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      I will try my best to change it, thank youu for the suggestion!!