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The Gent Can Never Win.

The drunken nymph, the sober virgin,
The creatures both, tempt to despair, passion, love, and woe.

Oh friendly fiend, inebriated jezebel, at the barriers of chivalry,
Ever striving to be the gent; refrain and remain contempt!
Refusal to participate, my despair transforms to hers,
Instantly dry, my damsel recognized
Her idiotic reflection, sadly not for the first time.
Feeling alone, brushed aside. The gent can never win.

Though sober angel, my one true love, you
Tempt and tease, yet fail to appease, the most animalistic of needs.
Ever striving to be the gent; I shall never ask nor force.
The longer she withstands, the more my respect will grow.
Titanic respect sparks Titanic lust and now I want her more.
‘Pishtushery's out,’ alongside my loins. The gent can never win.

This satanic twosome, most wicked team of all,
The fact they are the same woman, offers no consolation at all.

Author notes

#2

Written in 5-10 minutes one slightly hungover and confused Saturday morning. 03/07/2009..

About A Girl Who Craves For Sex While Drunk, Yet Is Staunchly Against It Whilst Sober, And The Position That Places Me In.

The Poem Could Be Percieved In Several Ways.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • fake-or-real-smile
    August 20
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    Wonderful poem and interesting story behind it.

    Well done, thanks for entering and good luck.

    X


  • mackereth
    July 29

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    There are many things that I would not say sober that seem to be so easy to say when drunk. This poem was very well written although the flow seemed a bit harsh. Well done.


  • blackrabbit. gold member
    July 29
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    haha, i understand this all too well.


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    July 15

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    bcz being under any substance creates a mind of willfull wiles and truth that lies within that would never be exposed when sober. well penned.


  • forbidden-colour
    July 14

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    Amazing tale, filled with emotions far beyond our own human powers and feelings.
    Thank you for entering
    ~Sophie


  • Ignis Corpus
    July 12

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    Wow. This is quite amazing. I kind of got a dazed image of a mind intoxicated. Which is okay, because one, that's what I got from the poem and two, it's a way I read it. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.

    Ignis Corpus


  • Leance
    July 9

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    Very well written. I have read this several times and have found different images each time. To be a woman of two sides is common in my own belief. We often want and think it is a requirement to crave sex as you stated in order to be loved when often times we certainly do not want to.
    I especially liked:
    Tempt and tease, yet fail to appease, the most animalistic of needs.
    Ever striving to be the gent; I shall never ask nor force.
    The longer she withstands, the more my respect will grow.
    I do believe you intentionally wrote this metaphorically and very well written.
    Thank you for entering and best of luck.
    Leance


  • The cliche typo
    July 7

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    Rating of title-(10/10)
    Rating of poem-(1/10)
    What you think the poem means- its about a girl who acts two different ways
    what you think-amazin- i especialy lovez the title- and please enter some BAD poetry next time ??? lol


    • The cliche typo
      July 8
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      i ment 10/10

      sorry... i know its a stupid prompt- but when used right the results are acctualy quite funny...


    • MalcolmDenovan1993
      July 8
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      Didnt realise you were wanting bad poetry. Sounds like the most stupid idea of all time. Why on Earth would i aim to write bad poetry?
      Rating of Poem 1/10 and then you go on to say the poem is amazing.
      Try and be consistent in your analysis, if you rate it as 1/10 then a bit of constructive critisism would go amiss.


  • kurdishking
    July 7

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    great job
    very well written
    I think it is the best ive read on this site gots to agree with the previous comment
    looking forward to read more of your brilliant work


  • kam359
    July 6

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    thanks for the comment on my poem and wow this is really good. i enjoyed reading it. sorry i cant go more in depth like you did on mine but all i know to say is that you did a very good job writing a great poem. ^.^


  • Sin with a grin
    July 6

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    wow this was amazing. I think its the best poem i ever read on here lol..(but dont tell anyone else) i really loved it


  • KatherineAnne
    July 4

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    Wow. This is your first? It's hard to tell. I really enjoyed this... I can relate to it (In a different perspective ofcourse)haha. Great job on this write =)
    Thank you and goodluck in the contest.

    -Kati


  • WuzGood
    July 4
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    HA!

  • WuzGood
    July 4

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    this is an excellent piece of work! its hard to believe you wrote it in 5 - 10 minutes.
    lots of emotion and it makes perfect sense.
    Good job! I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

    • MalcolmDenovan1993
      July 4
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      Thanks man, i really appreciate your comment. First verdict ive ever had on a piece of work as this is my first, also, i wasn't really keen on letting my english teacher read it incase she thought i was somesort of sex freak haha.
      It was written in 5-10 miniutes, although it wasn't too difficult to construct as ive been thinking about it alot recently

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