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Haiku

unfolding in birth
a bloom and a bug
scarred and scared

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Prompt:
"I was afraid of my fear, because I did not yet know the cause."
~Ian McEwan, Enduring Love.

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  • VelvetWings
    July 13

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    Hello, and thank you for the contest entry.
    I love haiku. And really short poetry in general. And this in particular is really deep; at first glance it could be about nature but when you read into it, between the lines there is a world of hurt and fear. In that way I also believe it reflects the quote, which is what I'm looking for for the contest of course.
    So once again thanks for entering, and good luck!
    ~Sparrow

  • Bad Bill
    July 5
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    Excellent - the poem is brief, but the impact is huge.

    Bill


  • Sherry gold member
    July 5

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    The innocence of a child the beauty they have at birth and the too loose that and become more aware of that bloom as we grow older in aging scared of not being that young bloom anymore or perhaps ever at all
    Think im there now already love U. ♥

  • J Macabre
    July 4

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    Yeah love can be scary sometimes especialy when it hits you so hard. After that there is no turning back.


  • PerVirtuous
    July 4
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    What a wonderful way with words!!!

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