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Advice for a friend...


Do you often dream
In a world of your own?

For unreachable goals, yet
Unknown by you,
Calling out for support that
Keeps evading?

There is more to be seen
Help can be found,
Everyone dreams, but
Many go to ground.

Ask yourself why,
Let your heart feel the truth,
Look closely to see who you are !!!

lol

© ali-p 2004

Author notes

ermmmmmmmm, acrostically speaking, this is what I would say...
Written March 22nd, 2004

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  • jc mcgee
    May 10, 2004
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    interesting acrostic, interesting message, interesting in general. well done, ali-p.


  • May 3, 2004
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    Like the acrostic. Very cute. Unless you don't want it to be cute, in which case it can be something else that's not specifically cute. Good message for a friend.

  • Irilis4u
    April 5, 2004
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    how, this really helped me with something Ali, lol, you are so right about what you were typing in the poem, at first I didn't understand it but after I re-read it, then all was clear, great job here lol, I like the "lol" in the end, gives the poem a serious/funny light hearted ending to something seriously deep.
    ~Iris~


  • di ivers
    March 28, 2004
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    ali pure geniune honesty...what more would i expect from you...thank you i really enjoyed reading this for the 10th time before i commented on it..i will keep it bookmarked and forever will i cherish it...thank you for being here when i have so needed someone...you are a true man one that should be very proud and profound about who you are..just when i sit to think..i realize that no one is better at poetry..and when i think i think none can be better to read..but you my dear friend never cease to amaze me..thank you for everything love ya lots..take care peace be with you always

    ~~DI~~


  • leannewales
    March 26, 2004
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    lol i missed the acrostic too until your notes...genious darling!...pure genius...hugs...leanne xxx


  • LadyStarlight
    March 25, 2004
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    This is very cleverly done and a great message for us all to learn from. I love acrostic poems when done properly

    Blessings and Smiles

    ~LadyStarlight~

  • StabbingFear
    March 23, 2004
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    Very subtle, I wouldn't have caught it if it wern't for your author comments...great advice, I think we all could use a little bit of it. I'll check out more of your poetry to see some other works..Great job!


  • sporkifye
    March 23, 2004
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    Good advice served up straight, with a side of attitude
    nicely done, sensitive and blunt all in one succinct package. I've always liked acrostics, mostly because they can be so very subtle. And subtlety is a beautiful thing.


  • cherche -d -ame
    March 23, 2004
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    Very well done and love the accrostic message
    Reenie

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