Fly said the Eagle, fly if you can
Then pushed him right out of the nest
And he flapped and he flapped
As his little heart raced
He was out on his first major quest
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He cried as he fell with the ground coming up
And he spread out his talons to slow
He flapped those wings hard
As he plummeted down
To the rising ground waiting below
He flapped best he could and he begged to take flight
But it wasn’t as simple as that
He’d never been taught
That a bent wing could fly
And he struggled to hold his wings flat
Dive, said the ocean; dive if you dare
Then swallowed him tail, beak and breast
And he flapped and he flapped
As his little heart raced
He was lost on his first major quest
Author notes
I reversed the two structures your verses followed.. I thought that was the best way to do it.
If someone threw me from a nest without telling me how to fly.. I don't suppose I'd have a happy ending.
I'm meant to place something in here, but I'm not sure what, so I'll just say 'this'.
The first two verses are by the contest owner, I presume, and the last two are mine.
A contest entry
- (COLLABORATION) FLY IF YOU CAN by condor.
1600 points, ended July 18, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I must say that i thought this was a terrific follow through for the poem i presented you. You did a great job of giving me exactly what i was after. I thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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