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Now I lay me down to sleep

Now I lay me down to sleep
trying to muffle my helpless weep
My razor kisses my wrist goodnight
praying I don't see morning light
If I should die before I wake
leave me lying in my bloody lake

Now I lay me down to sleep
down my arm the razor creeps
the pain that I'm feeling is such a delight
spreads through my body such an excite
If I should die before I wake
you will know I'm not a fake

Now I lay me down to sleep
dripping blood from cuts too deep
Nothing guides me through the night
because the darkness blurs my sight
If I should die before I wake
I'll leave behind this pain and hate

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  • skilter
    September 12
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    nice dark write, thank ¥ou for entering!


  • foreveryourslove
    September 3

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    wow this is awsome it is a perfectt emo /dark rite i have to admit u are in the top cant wait to read more of your stuff thanks for entering my contest and good luck


  • Leanna-bean
    August 25

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    This is FANTASTIC!!! I love it and it is so twisted how you turned a prayer of God to something so sick!!! I freaking love this! Thank you so very much for taking the time to enter my contest and god luck to you my friend!!!

    "Now I lay me down to sleep
    down my arm the razor creeps
    the pain that I'm feeling is such a delight
    spreads through my body such an excite"


    I really really like this part! Thanks again

  • thats really good its dark and bittersweet i love it.

  • Love this! this is a great poem and gos well with the pic. thx for entering.

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