light a match,
make a flame.
and show the whole world,
my game.
i play to win,
and i plan to kill.
and now that your in,
my sick little head,
ima get under your skin.
and when it gets to be bloody,
more fun!
but im gonna show you,
when ive won,
the same mercy,
you showed her.
so like i said,
were going to have some fun!
ill bring the knives,
you bring the gun.
see with me their is no bail
theirs is only me,
putting the last nail,
in your coffin.
as i bury you alive,
and dont worry,
you wont survive.
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A contest entry
- ~::~ Unlovable Mistakes & Unforgivable Sins! ~::~ by xxuglyducklingxx.
600 points, ended July 5, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I feel like you wrote with such imagery! The mental image you gave me...have you ever seen Saw? I think it's the first one where the girl is in the chair and has to rip open the guys stomach? And I feel like you're talking to the girl in the chair..."this is going to hurt..." and you're putting her through such pain..repayment perhaps for the pain they caused you? Justification for the tears? You realize that it will hurt...which means you aren't oblivious to other's emotions, and in this intense of situation, you're actually tuned in, but yet rest assure them that they won't make it out of this alive. That is intense and really good actually. Another great one.
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Oooh it's awesome and threatening! I like the rhymes you used, they aren't forced or random. It all comes together into a twisted poem! Best of luck in you contest!
-AJ -
Beautifully Intense.
This was so heartbreaking, and intense. The passion was soul searing. I really like your style, you've got a talent. Thanks for entering.
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