As I sit
Gazing into the endless ocean
Crashing waves to the shore
I pick this sand up
And it runs through my fingers
Like water, so smooth, so soft
So warm
It reminds me of time
Days that once were
Not the bad times
Not the hate
Or the hurt
Just the days
That once were
The memories of picnics in the park
The endless nights of summer stars
Sneaking through your window
Falling asleep by your side
And waking up in your arms
The love
Now long past
In my heart
Forever
Will it last.
Author notes
Just some thoughts while visiting the ocean today. I am not really one to write free verse, my poems normally have rhyme, so this was somewhat different for me.
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Well, seeing as how i always love your work, i decided to take a look at some of the poems i missed while i was... away. This is one of my new fav's i think, mostly because i idenify so well with it. It seems so rare to find poetry about losing the ones you cared for without any bitterness or harshness in them. This, on the other hand, is such a simply beautiful reflection... The imagery of the sand was astounding and (although it's not your usual style) the free verse worked very very well for me. Wonderful. =)
Peace Love
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I like this
The ocean waves I always find very relaxing setting the mood for my mind to wander, the texture of the warm sand flowing like water through your fingers, this all has a calming effect allowing for good thoughts and memories to surface. Times like this tend to smooth and soften the past, nice poem and nice use of nature to set the mood. The mood is nicely reflected in the poem.
Rick
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this was awesome, great free verse
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It will with this piece, it will last
This was Beautiful, and to be honest, I'm happy to see something happier =)
It's great for artists, writers, dancers, and singers, to balance out their emotions when they put their works to work.
Beautiful =) and the Imagery was Fantastic
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wonderful...if this is different for you then please write more free verse...loved the imagery and the ocean...great poem
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I like it a lot, good write!
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Beautiful
The imagry was excellent my friend, such a gentle piece by you, well done, very romantic indeed. Many blessings to you.
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i like your dabble into free verse. It didnt seemed like a rough write for you, seemed more like a collected thought froim your mind rather than a forced re-worded write. It also struck me as very fitting that sand through an hourglass often capture a lifetime, while sand through your fingers captured the moment. Great inspiration
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Ah..you began this poem whth the great imagination..and continued to make reveal the story of the love..very well done work..thanks for sharing..
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