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they called us the future
and encouraged a potential
we didn't see; but he had
a folder of dreams and an
assurance I believed in
next year, he'll read the
dedication of my success
and laugh at the children
of the others. we might
have failed chemistry, but
he taught us how to dream
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Author notes
prompt: "all of us failed to match our dreams of perfection. so I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible." - William Faulkner
90/100
A contest entry
- Quickie by Kathraina.
575 points, ended July 4, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is a draft - be as harsh as you like.
Comments
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succinct write , compelling read
this is so "my life" for every reader and sill retains its unique flavours. we all yearn for mentors who can teach us to dream...write on and dream on!
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I love the meaning in this write, there is so much truth and relateability here.
Wonderful job
♥ Kate -
but he had
a folder of dreams
-oh geez, that is so damn good.
there is something so enchanting here. the language is so strong and the inclusiveness (a word?) of 'we' certainly helps.
damn, you've done it again.
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Wow hun, I am speechless.
You took the prompt in a direction
I would never have thought of
on my own. I am not the most
familiar with William Faulkner
but I can see you are, and you've
expressed your dissertation to him
beautifully with vigor & class.
I love this piece.. I have learnt
a lot, even from the limited
amount of words.
Terrifiic job on this
& best wishes
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"encouraged a potential we didn't see"
My GOD that sounds like a lot of teenagers.
e.g. me :C
"I believed in" ==> "I wanted to believe in"
Or not...
if that would change the meaning in a way that's not sincere.
Chemistry is what made me fail second term. :C
Well, that and physics.
Bio, man! That's what I chose to do next year (along with astronomy, which is new and does not count as a science course, which is fucked.)
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Jessica
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Good luck!
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