Another job well done,
Another women saved
So why do I feel like I've failed so
And taken years from birth to grave
They come to me broken hearted
Broken faced, and broken souled
I patch their wounds, hold them close
Warm their skin, and am still left cold
I wait some time to find another
So I may fill myself again
Then she'll come, all alone
Feeling like she was born a sin
What do I do, well I do it every time
I show her how she looks through my eyes
Over time of soft touching, and undeniable love
Her whimpers start to die, and we no longer hear her cries
But then without fail, her eyes start to wonder
And another man she'll find
I'm good enough to make her see herself
But me and love never enter her mind
I've let a thousand girls touch my soul
And not one has wanted me
But I swear I'll never stop
Even though I will never become a we
Written By Beau Bennett
Dedicated to never giving up on making the hurt and used see who they really are, I just wish someone would help me see me (crying as I'm typing this)
Author notes
A C I D B A T H
A contest entry
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I'm sorry about these trials in your life. I wish you the best. Your poem shows real emotion. You wrote a great poem.
Thank you very much for your entry.
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Sad Story
OMG
Your poem reaches deep, describes the healing work of a caring soul.
Dear Poet,
thank you for entering my contest:"Broken hearts, Lost Dreams," with your
submission, "My Job, My Calling."
This work reminds me of the social worker, psychologist, Priest, psychiatrist
or healer who tends to the broken but may never be touched beyond duty
i felt deep loneliness in this; don't know if it was mine or yours or both?
wishing you the best
till then
stay
liquid
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Wow, this is truly a powerful and great piece, your emotions and feelings put into this piece is saddening and described in the most beautiful way. I know it's painful right now but i truly hope the right one will come your way and love you for true beauty you hold within you. Glad you showed me this poem and great job!!
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I have had the same problem believe me i know how you feel but just keep your head up all the girls that i've liked and that i really got into either ignored me or cheated on me but the worst that has happen to me was to know that they made a bet to know who could go and have sex with me faster I gave them my heart my soul and then they betrayed me just like that i didn't know they knew each other and they were lovers two lesbians i caught them kissing It broke my heart i almost killed my self there but i then realized it wasn't worth it i still try to find that one person who is worth it and i believed i found her i gave her everything in my heart and all she wants is friendship how do i feel about that i cried i changed for her i have never been the same and now I know that I'm just a hopeless romantic that gives it all way to soon to recieve nothing in return but believe me i know that somewhere some place i will find love and it will be a good love that's what you have to believe too don't give up so soon love is out there sometimes is not you who finds it it might just be the other way around.
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Great Amazing Outstanding Bravo
Your words are deep the meaning and the motion that you show just leaves me speech less i have had same emotions and trust me when i tell you this i use to care what people thought about me cause i wanted to fit in but no i just dont care not as much how can people see what you are if you don't see it your self be who you wanna be on your own don't let others interfere with your own self to thy on self be true and that's how people will notice that there is something more than just the outside look
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Wow the emotions are so deep and strong. Ya I agree this is beautiful and heeart breaking. Thats sad feeling like you was born a sin. Everyone is born pure and inocent. Thank you for sharing andit was great.
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Beautiful. And heartbreaking. I know where you've been, I have been there also. I can truly feel your every word written here...wow...It will not last forever, someday some worthy women will realize your worth.
An incredible piece...
Smile♫
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taken yearrs of birth to grav I like that sentence, powerful feelings in this poem.
thousand girl touch my soul I like that too. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read your write. -
Really powerful emotion is in the words. I actually started crying during this.
I liked it. 
Dax
PS-Don't cry!
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please dont cry,,,someone did this for me once,,without that person my children would never have been born, i would have swallowed the pills at seventeen,
you have a beautiful heart,, the goodness you deserve will find U
T
btw the poem just stirred my soul, you have real talent
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Inspiring indeed
I can relate to this poem to some extend. I have very closely seen in my life that most careful persons are often ignored.You are never alone and this is the only solace. I wish unselfish job is somewhere finally rewarded!
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Aww this is so touching!
"They come to me broken hearted
Broken faced, and broken souled
I patch their wounds, hold them close
Warm their skin, and am still left cold"
Don't give up so soon. You seem like a very warm-hearted person, and love will come to those who deserve itwhen the time is right. Don't rush it.
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good entry
There is the comma missing from one of the i'ves and the she'll,but apart from that,this is a fault less,flawless entry,which is an astonishingly knowledgeable,delightfully refreshing take on the prompt I issued.Thank you for your interest in this contest.You should take pride in this creative genius,it is so very good.
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wow your crying when you write it and ive got tears in my eyes now. this is brilliant and very well written. really great.
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This is so sweet and sad at the same time. Its beautiful how you open your heart to those in need of love. Sad that it is never returned. But, it is oh so refreshing to know you don't let this stop you from being who you are. Keep living and when you least expect it, your one true love will be there for you. Usually it is the last person you'd imagine it to be. I really enjoyed this piece.
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this isdeeply touching to the heart, always keep the hope
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Wonderful! I like it alot. I read it aloud to my best friend and she has a good opinion about it so here she is. Lydia: omfg i absolutely love it and totally know how you feel... i let a lot of guys get really close to me and see the part of me who never comes out but i act like its no big deal so they don't think of anything. while im saying things that make me feel like what the freak am i doing telling him this they just seem to accept it and lead me on so i fall head over heels in fantasy about what i wish until they break my heart. i help them, i'm there for them when no one else is and they talk about they're girlfriends i mean come on ouch they have me help them with stuff or get them together and it feels like they are twisting a knife in my heartso i give them a part of me ill never get back just to see them with some one else. but i can't stop i can't not hope, not pray that maybe this time he'll be different this time he'll want me, this time he'll see through my charades and accept me for who i am thanx 4 your time, back to lee-lee. LEANNA: I still don't understand why she calls me Lee-lee! oh well i enjoyed the write and i have a comment as well. I have a tendency to become best friends with the people I have a crush on (i don't even do it on purpose) and the problem with that is they start thinking of me as a sister and not something more.they then turn intojerks and asses and theystab me in the back. you only hate those who have touched your heart. KeEp WrItInG!!!
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Aw this is so sad and so true. I know exactly what you meant, this is so painfully sad. I have felt like this before, it seems like I am the most caring person but the one that gets shit on in the end. I am so sorry you feel this way, it isn't fair for a person to feel this way.
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i agree
I just saw your comment on the poem,My job,my calling,the author submitted in my latest contest about envy.I found it a truly engaging write,so full of truth. How are you finding your contest,the one focusing on song lyrics?
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Acid this is very beautiful. I wish the same thing that someone would help me see me. I thought he was the one that would and I fell in love hard but like everyone else he walked away and left me a bigger mess then I was to begin with. Thank you for wanting to share this with me. You and I seem to be very much alike only I am 1/2 a century old
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