Dull fluorescent lights flicker on...
Within the bulbs,blood is stained upon...
The somber illumination reveals macabre sights...
Metal bins containing drying piles of entrails...
Bones sit in a broken,grime stained pile...
The rust dismally reaches down towards flesh bales...
From barbed wire,hacked corpses hang...
From the ceiling,the wire streams...
Within these walls are their dreadful screams...
Their exposed innards hang morbidly...
Puddles of coagulated blood and filth pool up...
Running to an old drain,that drips deeper within...
Under, the blood was collected from each ruptured...
Here in this lurid structure.
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i have to wonder what the blood is being collected for?? other than that, i thought this poem was really good. shockingly morbid. absolutely wonderful. well done.
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So morbidly gross, but it is such a great write.
From barbed wire,hacked corpses hang...
From the ceiling,the wire streams...
Within these walls are their dreadful screams...
Wonderful job with the imagery.
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i can count on you to deliver the darkness,great as allways bro,i needed that.
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"From barbed wire,hacked corpses hang...
From the ceiling,the wire streams...
Within these walls are their dreadful screams..."
this was a vivid nightmare. Masterful as always. -T
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Ok, couldn't choose a favourite part, the entire piece kicked ass
Nice One
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YOUR BACK
This was imagry galore and gore you are back on point everything is like you never stoped, Well done on the flow and your words are superb my friend, I think this is one of your best. I loved the fourth and fifth stanza and like the words lurid structure. peace
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Loving the Layout of this straight away...
Awesome words to paint the pictures that explode from your mind
I sense a deep meaning to this of "someone hanging on, trying to keep going...but underneath so ruptured,,,
wow a lovely write but so sad knowing this came from your heart... we need that heart to heal ((((((healing hugz))))))))
xxxxx
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You have my mind wondering to why the blood was being collected and what its going to be used for? Very good imagery in this horror poem. I enjoyed reading it. Please keep it up. Your gift is wonderful.
Hugs to you J,
Marie
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ewwwwww
but very vivid imagery!!!!
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