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A Life Cut Short

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Confined to one small space within a room
a diary told the world of all her fears,
she’d never feel a baby in her womb
or kiss its cheeks and dry unhappy tears.

   She should have felt the sun upon her skin
   and walked among the fields of wild flowers,
   a young girl’s life cut short is such a sin,
   no chance to while away her childhood hours.

No child should live where light is grey and dim
as anguish wipes the smile from her face,
incarcerated at a madman’s whim;
a death camp was to be her final place.

   Untimely death at such a senseless age,
   yet still she lives in words upon the page.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt ...
Anne Frank was born eighty years ago today, she died less than sixteen years later in Bergen-Belsen.

You have several options here, write of the life she should have had, of her time in hiding, or give an analogous story. In any form of poetry, but no prose please.

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  • Pattiboo silver member
    August 27

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    I have only just found this sonnet a worthy winner of the contest. You know when they read the lines They shall not grow old as we that are left grow old, Time shall not weary them or the years condemn. They make it sound as though those who died are better off because they don't have to suffer old age. When one thinks of the millions of fit young men and women who died on both sides of the war what a truly terrible waste of human life it all was and still is.


  • UncleDunk gold member
    July 30

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    That is beautiful. You rhyme with such ease. People speak differently, which makes it hard for me to put a line down that everyone will read with the same flow, but you nail it every time. I envy your talent.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 30
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      Thank you for your kind comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this piece.

      Sue
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  • Ellis gold member
    July 14
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    Pure Gold


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    July 10

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    This is so sad and you Sonnet is well worthy of the Golden trophy. Lovely entry and Congratulations.

    Becks


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 12
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      Many thanks Becks for your lovely comment and congrats, I appreciate both.

      Sue

  • A fine bit of verse here Sue, congrats.

  • ecrivain01
    July 9
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    Yeah. What he said.

    Good job and a very insightful poem.

  • Sad and powerful, reflecting the personal and the global significance of each death at the hands of such state sponsored murder.

    Not to mention in superb rhyme and meter.

    Jeff

  • OH .. Anne Frank.. bless her little heart. This was a lovely poem depicting what she went through. Thank you for bringing this to our attention. Had no idea its been 80 years since her birth.

  • ecrivain01
    July 5
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    Her death was a real tragedy ...

    Even sadder, in actuality, is that there are only about six million Jews left in Israel, and maybe that many in the U.S. and scattered around the globe. Hitler really did almost succeed in wiping out the entire race, proving that Shakespeare's words are even more true than most people think:

    "The evil that men do lives after them. The good is oft interred with their bones."

    I hope there's a special spot in Hell for Hitler, as well as for all the monsters like him, including Mugabe and Ahmadinejad, and all the other mass murderers.

  • ecrivain01
    July 5

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    Very nice ...

    and very nicely done.

    I'm sure Anne would have liked this one as well.


  • moonbumps silver member
    July 5

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    This says it all for me -expertly written-bringing home a solid message and leaving you wondering-Why?
    Deserves top billing in my book-
    Hilly xxx


  • csmmoms2
    July 4

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    I remember reading a revue in the NY Times. "I read something today that gives me hope for the future." -c

    And if I ever get to Amsterdam.

    • Thank for reading Chuck ... she sure was one hell of a young lady.

      If you are ever heading to Amsterdam, give me a call.....

      Sue
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  • Eric Marsh
    July 4

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    great

    a lovely tribute not just to anne frank i feel but for every young life cut short...wonderful...i have never seen a pic of her........great stuff.....keep cool...p.s. i cant its bleedin red how again....

    • Many thanks for reading Eric and I agree, any young life cut short is a tragedy and her story should be read by every teenager, maybe it would give some of them a bit more purpose in life.

      Sue
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  • Bad Bill
    July 4

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    A beautifully-written sonnet with a tragic theme. Your poem is excellent - just one small error, though. I think you mean "while" rather than "wile" in the second stanza.

    Great work,
    Bill

    • Many thanks Bill for reading, commenting and correcting, I have been assured that I can use either version of 'wile' 'while', but the version that fits best is 'while' as it means what I wanted to say.

      Sue
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  • ceegeeess
    July 3

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    Light and liffe!


    No child should live where light is grey and dim
    as anguish wipes the smile from her face," very beautifully said. smile and light have a divine connection. Light and freedom are connected.your thoughts are ever great ,sweet Sue

    • Thank you Ceegeeess for your comment. No child should have to live the way she did, but I am thankful she was able to let the world know of her plight.

      Sue
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  • arafura gold member
    July 3
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    Great tribute to one of the great heroines of the 20th century. This tugged at the heart...

    • Thank you John, your comment always welcome. Anne was a young lady that I would have liked to have met and also one that should have lived.

      Suzie Q
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  • hawkeslake gold member
    July 3

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    It hurts as much now as it did the first time I heard the story of Anne Frank; your poem forces us to look at what she (and all children) should have had while growing up. A beautiful tribute, and a heart-rending reminder: lest we forget! Lita

    • Thank you for reading Lita, she really was a remarkable young lady who deserved a life that she would never have.

      Sue

  • A beautifully written tribute Sis.

    Not exactly a pleasure to read but one that should be read so we remember

    Hugs

    Jem

    • Many thanks Sis, sometimes truth and reality are a very difficult read.

      Suz


  • No child should live where light is grey and dim
    as anguish wipes the smile from her face,
    incarcerated at a madman’s whim;
    a death camp was to be her final place.

    that was my favorite part but i would have liked to see this strength in the rest of this!

  • Bob Fox
    July 3

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    Sue

    And what a shame. But today even more tragic is the fact that so many would not even know who Anne Frank was. They know their cartoon characters for sure though. And our world is in denial once again. Excellent write dear poet.

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