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  Drew fast,Spoke Big.
Will it last? please don't kid.
Conveying a different message,
The girl spoke to him.
"True myself too has pondered of a lonley
night without . . . Wings!"

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  • Scandalous Beauty
    July 5
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    True myself too has pondered of lonely night without wings. I love this line.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 4
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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is interesting I like the way you have included the speech at the end here - but I think that you need a space after the comma in the first line, and there is a typo in the second last line "lonley" should be "lonely" - but other than those small things - this is a good start here

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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