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from the soft mud
beauty pops out
then blooms


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July 03, 09
-Neha



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Haiku
Syllable count - 8 (http://www.wordcalc.com/)

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  • wave1080
    October 6
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    wow!

    beautiful write dear


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 22
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    This is sweet.

  • mina nagi
    July 22

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    A few words saying so much about beauty...
    I liked it...

    mina


  • Peteskid gold member
    July 12

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    yes it does, pop out and this is a ell done short verse, brings a lot in so few lines, so very well done...PK


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 3

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    Hello

     

    I would think the beauty would be IN the blooms?

     

    ...and you have 10 sylls...not 8......no worries, as long as you did not go over 17 in three lines

     

    Bear -


    • Neha Sharma silver member
      July 4
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      hmmm... I counted the sylls on a counter avalble on the net. before that I also counted them as 10! may be they r having some problems. And the beauty is obviously in the blooms... the haiku is pointing at it but indirectly.

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