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The Drummer Missed my Beat


Gaia
Ancient pulsing heart
Pumping life sensations
through sedated souls

Calling all to rise
follow the cause
of rejuvenation

Trust your inheritance
The song within
that whispers
You can fly!

For magic opens eyes
Lives within cells
Causes new life
Resurrection
that belongs to believers
those who trust themselves
Who listen to the ocean
and perceive the moons.....




But I cannot hear
I cannot see
The curtain fell down
when I hid behind the rock
and they passed me by





The drummer missed my beat










Author notes

Prompt: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lwQmDvuORY0


My tears and my grief for the little ones who are passed by because they are too shy.

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    July 5
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    A gorgeous video, and your interpretation is truly mystical; however, I did not believe the last boy fell, because we only see him go down a little while. I choose to think he flew, also. That aside, your poem is quite lovely, even without the video. I read it first, and quite liked it, and then looked at the video. Great job! Lita


    • aslanlight
      July 23
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      I was imagining a child that wasn't really there, thinking about my son and how he hides.

  • drifting cloud silver member
    July 4
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    Nice. I liked the phrase 'through sedated souls'. We have drowned out the drum beat with our own thoughts. But Gaia and us are both waking together.

    I watched the video. We are all like children. The problem with life is there are other drummers distracting us from the real drummer our heart wants to follow.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    July 3

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    Yes I could see it was about that particular song and video - captured your points very well here and this poem is very imaginative, a work of art. I like the bit at the end.. the drummer missed my beat...
    As if someone was left behind.


    • aslanlight
      July 23
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      Wow, thanks for the gold, I didn't realise I'd won it until just now, I wasn't notified.


  • BluRosePoet8488
    July 3

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    Georgia, A nice little poem you have here. Sad, but oh so true these days. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
    ~Donna~


    • aslanlight
      July 3
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      Did you watch the video in the author's notes? It's incredible!

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