No ignorant but well placed corporate redneck renamed Arkansas.
Properly it should have been named: Quapaw, Acansa, or Alcansea...
Arkansas doesn't make sense for a reason.
Most Arkansans aren't aware and probably never knew the name Arkansas was coined by an uninformed french explorer.
One who didn't think it mattered, just a jot in his journal.
That might have made some sense.
Oddly enough, it hasn't made a difference.
When they were informed by the insular bipolarizing media that the French as a nation didn't want to suck off to their plans to invade a sovereign nation
they just said, Freedom Fries
and probably, "Yeehaw!"
because that shit does not matter to ignorant and possibly drunk rednecks.
Speed is cheap in the south...and people are getting shot every day.
It is easy to change...
as if anybody outside this regime of masturbatory cyclic ignorance
could move something other than money around...it might.
Pride does have merit, but only if it's backed up by character.
The French were the only country who came to the aid of establishing America...
Some Americans, perhaps unaware of this, turn on them for being ....
say it with me...Un-American.
Like a Mexican.
Say it with me,
"Yee-Haw!"
What do we do with these ignorant rednecks?
Why do we give them degrees to preach...I mean teach...
We somehow expect the uninformed to at least analyze with some modicum of common sense their seemingly enlightened but mostly adopted decisions
Why now?
Was it really manifest destiny that we took the land from the Native Americans
and pretended to place ourselves in that seat of respect?
Good old fashioned imperialism working to make us all weaker in character,
working out for us bastards in the west...
most of the beneficiaries don't know quite what the history of the word implies
and would beat your fag ass for enunciating it or explaining it properly...
they would probably fight for it if they were educated enough to know what it all means.
Jesus fucking Christ,
Sweet Zombie Jesus,
take us from this place.
It's a mess.
God is a myth and Satan simply does not exist except as a practical archetype.
Ladies and gentleman, I think you are almost nearly evolved enough for me to reveal to you the obvious truth.
Do you really need anything else from me?
Possibly, probably some of you do.
I've told you the truth once already.
If you don't get it by now,
you're probably not my target audience.
Don't worry...you'll wish for my liberal girl loving fag tree hugging beautiful green utopia in the end.
When you're buying the air, working weeks for water, and living in a land of dust.
I know it sounds like shitty sci-fi...but we're cloning sheep now
our watches show videos and we're running our houses from solar electricity......
The minority of the world worships Jesus.
Come on up.
Stop running the maze.
Enlightenment isn't like winning the lottery.
It's more like growing up, and opening your eyes....
seeing things for what they mean to you,
accepting the disillusion.
Sadly necessary.
You'll die.
What are you passing on for tomorrow?
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1St Draft. Revision3
Pretty in Chaos.
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I like this, for me it's
honest hyperbole
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Always a good read when I click on anything associated with your handle, no matter how cynical. dig it!
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As you say, this is just a first draft.
So this is just a general comment that you may accept or reject as you wish.
IMO it's difficult to incorporate strong didactic opinions into good poetry. To put this another way, poetry isn't usually the best form of writing to employ, if you want them to be read. Such opinions often lack the decorative features a poem needs in order to have impact on the reader, such as metaphor, simile, alliteration. Also a poem gains power by being edited to the essentials, leaving as much meaning as possible implicit, and avoiding repetiton, whereas good teaching and argument often rely on repetiton.
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Reading my piece again with consideration to your ideas, I'm happier with my write. It's certainly not completely formed...but yeah, I think it has artistry and even form...unfortunately in it's current incarnation...not one that's consistent. Certainly not one that's formal.
I'll probably rewrite this piece many more times though. It's a rough draft.
Revised only once or twice now rather intuitively.
I stand by my previous comment. Your critique was exceptional and hit the mark on so many points. Thank you. If everyone wrote comments of this caliber I'd have a chance at being a much better poet by now.
Infinitely better than, "Wow, great write!"
I hope you have been commenting on this site for awhile and will continue to do so.
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Thank you for your frank and cogent commentary. Poetry is the only means of expression I have to express these opinions...and get these things out. I don't think otherwise I would have any forum for these thoughts. Good or bad, my writing is mostly self indulgent. Thank you for calling me out with a simple and frank opinion, never challenging, but simply making astute observations.
I didn't really need to be called out...you didn't provide me with new information, but at the same time...no one has really stated these things to me or articulated them. I'm sort of in love with your mind...
It's probably only infatuation.
Either way...thanks for reading and commenting.
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