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the perspective of comfortable shoes

they were not
the best days of her life

school in high
turned low
stripped
starved for significance

tempest trapped
in tossed turns
and burns that
called for
bereavement

a shoulder glance
would indicate
her better day
is now.

A contest entry

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  • awannabepoet
    July 9

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    Oh wow, this came form TOE SOCKS, how very creative indeed. I really like the flow and the imagery too.


  • williamstown silver member
    July 5
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    No. not supposed to make you laugh, but if it


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 4

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    I really like the "turns and burns" image here - it sounds amazing in my mind and the alliteration before that is wonderful this is a great write - and I love the title!


    Polly


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    July 3

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    Excellent! Such a creative write on the prompt! Thank you for your entry
    Gaylene


  • Heroesrox
    July 3

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    Very nice take on the prompt! Awesome work here. Thanks so much for the great share! Keep penning and good luck in the contest!

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