She come like the chill of a dark night,
Haunting me , stalking me,
To feast upon my heart, blacken my soul,
Like a vampire , she drinks of my forbidden love,
Drains the life out of me ,laughing as I slowly wither and die
Spell bound, mezmerized ..I lay frozen ..stiff.. unable to even cry.
Im big tough guy ..
I try to scream yet ..I am silenced by.. fear and shame .
She hushes my trembling lips with a kiss,
Breathing me in , filling me with her .. dying breaths.
I surrender.. she crushes me with her strength , devours me,
Abuses me with her sexual ..debortuary, slaughters me.. slowly .. ruthlessly,
As she whispers .. this is love.
Now all that remains is the shadow of a man I once was,
Standing ..shivering.. half naked ..by my big cold bed.
An aching heart, A quivering chin,
a name burnt upon my soul,
Long ago in life beyond.. never..SUCCUBUS.
Author notes
PIC PROMPT SUCCUBUS BY DORIAN CLEAVENGER
A contest entry
- Prewrite Mania!! :D by XxLoverOfDarknessxX.
900 points, ended July 8, 87 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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AWESOME JOB HERE! I loved it! Very dark and eerie.
I loved your emotions in this piece, as well as your phenomenal imagery. 
BRAVO! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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The mistress Lilith been paying house visits? Nice poem my friend, thanks for entering this dark write and good luck.
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nice poem
love the description
thank for entering and good luck
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WOW. this was really good! it gave me goosebumps and chills up my spine. WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Oh this was eerie..
sensual spellbinding casting a chill upon my spine
Wow,this was really good,babe..I loved it With every little goosebump i got!
Wonderful piece!
love,Mandi
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you inspired this with you poem onghosts and that chat behind the scenes so thank you hope it scared the pants off you lol love glenn
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oh how I love a storm
on a dark and stormy night your words cast a chill and yet they are charged with illicit delight
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thank you hun she scares me that one had to put her out there she hurt me here pointing to groin lol happy 4th of july to you hope it goes off with a bang . xo
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my thanks for the fourth
I get Canada day and then the fourth, whoopie two hangovers in one week. Just finished trying wash an oil slick off a baby seagull, smewhat sucessfull, he or she is resting in the dog crate with a half a can of sardines -
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do you know how to tell the sex of a seagull if you can get 1 finger in its hole its a boy 2 then its a girl lol your a kind loving soul to give it a second chance shows your heart . xo
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you are perfectly welcome to pop over and check, I did not get that far, but if he eats the anchovies I think he will survive, no idea of sex but his name is roger
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You did a wonderful job
on this the whole scene
played out before my eyes
Thank you for sharing
and best wishes in the contest
~Pastel
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thank you pastels unfortunately the comp reads 50 words so im removeing from the contest but thanks for comming for a read and a fine comment nice too see you x
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