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Victim

Much to young to remember clearly, but forever tainted with a trouble soul,
stolen life stolen smile, a life running out of control,
just a baby so very young, will never understand why,
that monster murdered the innocense forceing his victim to live a lie,
it will never change no matter how many pills are forced down,
the slashes will never heal the pain can be drowned,

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this is just a draft

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 3

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is wonderful for a draft I really like the tone of the poem and the atmosphere is very dark well done on a great start!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


    Polly
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  • morgana raven Greeters member
    July 3
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Welcome to the site, though just a draft what you have so far is very well written. Welcome to the site, if you have any questions please feel free to ask me.
    Laura,
    site-greeter.

    (you can also save your poems as drafts while you are on the 'add poem' page so that you don't have to submit them until they are finished ^^ )


    • LsKnight
      July 4
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      thanks!

      thanks for your comments! and thanks for letting me know about saving them as drafts, I'm such a newbie lol..thanks again