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Who Is She

She is the moon I cannot see,
      The light gifted to another world
                  but not to me...

Thus do I inquire, please
      who is she?

She is Luna's twin,
      The other side of Artemis
                   and little sister to Rhiannon...

Thus do I beg,
      what is her name?

There are two worlds to see,
      A dulled world of blacks and grays
                 and a world lush with greens and browns...
      The moon is dark in one world
                 yet in the other it is full and blue...

Thus do I question,
     where is her home?

Between us time means nothing,

       A century in mine

                 is a decade in hers...

Thus do I implore you,

      when will we meet? 

 

In our two worlds we wait.

       In our loneliness we believe.

                  And in our faith we hope.

Thus I ask this last question,

       So all others become moot,

                                                  Is she mine?

                                                               Or am I hers? 

 

 

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    September 20

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    thats a well deserved silver
    the poem is really thought provoking and the imagery here is simply intense!
    keep penning


  • swim.x
    July 4

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    I actually really enjoyed this - the mythology connotations and allusions were very well threaded in, and the questions in italics seemed very fitting and helped the flow. the italics separated them from the other sections of the poem and made it easy to read and understand. the questions were very uncolloqiual and that really made it quite fitting to what time period you were referencing in the poem. really well written and good luck in the contest you've entered.
    chin up,
    swim.x


    • caedwyn
      July 4
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      thank you very much ^^ i'm glad you liked it, it's one of my favorites that i have written ^-^