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Blood Boiled Stew

I stand alone,
Except for you,
I'm ready for,
Some blood-boiled stew.

I care not,
Of who you are,
Be family,
Or a rock-star.

I cannot be stopped,
So don't even try,
It won't ever matter,
If you scream or cry.

If you try to run,
You will not get far,
I have the speed,
Of a racing car.

Punch me,
I will break your hand,
So do what I say,
On my demand.

Stand there, now,
Try not to move,
It will hurt less,
If I am in my groove.

Tear your throat out,
Not a fuss,
Drink your blood,
Fill my lust.

Now the next victim,
I will choose,
For some more,
Blood boiled stew.

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Comments

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  • My Chronos gold member
    September 4
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    I found this definitely intriguing


  • sgking123
    September 3

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    wow

    A racy poem that speeds and kind of emphatically forces the victim to give up.I loved the poem for its speed and careful choice of words..however I could see no twist.....you turn to another victim..is more of a continuation.But indeed a dracula of a poem.....lol.Thanks for your entry dear.


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    September 2

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    I was just scrolling through the entries of the "show me how far you've come" contest and this title caught my eye. I thought it was a very clever title, and I am not disappointed in the poem that went along with it
    The beat and rhythm that you built up with the rhyme you used really kept this piece moving along quickly.
    I could definately tell it was a vampire write, but it was done in almost a fresh new way. I really can't explain it, all I know is you've got a pretty good poem here


  • emma...
    August 30

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    Nice job with this :] The emotions are very powerful & the ending was shocking. Really well written! Just to clarify, this is your newer piece that you entered, right?
    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    August 29

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    Cool...

    Impressive work...
    I've written a few vampyre pieces myself Always great to see other's take on the genre...
    Sweet descriptive narrative that had me licking my canines...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Shantti
    August 4

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    Oh my goodness, this is very well written. You deffinately made me cringe, especially at the end

    Tear your throat out,
    Not a fuss,
    Drink your blood,
    Fill my lust.

    Now the next victim,
    I will choose,
    For some more,
    Blood boiled stew.

    Oh my God.... Very well done. Thank you so much for entering my contest


  • Night Terrors
    July 31
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    sounds like my kinda stew lol thank you for entering


  • Antebellum
    July 5

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    Good luck

    &&
    thanks so much for entering.
    [If you make it to the finalists I'll leave a better comment.]

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 3

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    i liked this piece. it was really good! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!

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