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Manslaughter Tuesday! 2 for 1 !!!

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Her morphine eyes go running from his gaze...

 

 

I taste her sunset falling down on me.

 

The deceased cornfield rustles in the wind.

 

 

Her stare's consuming my calligraphy.
Terracotta tears stream tracing her face.

Strangers start another pastel romance.
Her morphine eyes go running from his gaze.

 


Manslaughter Tuesday, they give two for one.

 

 

Mother's diagnosis: Apologize.

Terracotta tears stream tracing her face.

 

 

 

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  • AwesomeJoshsome
    July 7

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    I feel lost in this poem... Maybe because I don't fully understand it. I like it though. The manslaughter part is very very interesting
    AJ


    • redbarchettadrive gold member
      July 7
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      Thanks Josh!
      I don't understand some of these myself, as most try writing themselves without any input from me. So...thanks!


  • DecorusApparatus
    July 5

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    Just what I needed to read. Quite impeccable Red, well done. Also, I'm digging the backround. Just subtle enough to accent not override the poem.
    Keep writing!

    --Katie.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 3
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    aw a wonderful write good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • Iyaden
    July 3

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    Bizzare and creepy. Definetely a very different and creative write. The background and structure complement this perfectly. You have some serious talent


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 3
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    I liked it a lot... but you are a tease for the title saying something about a sonnet. lol

    • redbarchettadrive gold member
      July 3
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      I deleted the word sonnet. I was so wrapped up in making each line 10 syllables, that I forgot the sonnet rhyme scheme. My bad.
      Thanks for popping in Mark!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 3
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    Oh how i did enjoy this one. Lovely job
    thank you for entering


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