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Slow Draining

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Petals of the precious rose

ripped from its base

A naked bud to the stem

tries to stand in place

 

Passion flowed from her soul

a beauty fights disgrace

Scars of past take control

she's dead without a trace

 

Lust filled man trapped her

pulling all the strings

Darkness had kept her safe

against the vilest things

 

Tears of pain cascading fast

into a river of hellish flames

Time's ceased there's not enough

tears to drown out the foolish games

 

Between the valleys of despair

the flow of agony exists

Aching beyond belief she surrenders

for there's no reason to resist

 

She will drain slowly into the abyss

until every limb runs dry

Breathing until the last breath gone

nor left the strength to cry

 

Staring up

there is no hope

silenced by

lifes death grip

Limber she is

her eyes

gone black

Hearts stopped

pumping

her energies

sucked out

Gauging of eyes

she no

longer sees

she lays

patiently

for death

to kiss her

future

goodbye

 

Author notes

Word Prompts

1. Rose XXX

2. Anti-Christ

3. Love

4. Bevolence

5. Dark XXX

6. Lust XXXX

7. Lucidity

8. River's xXXX

9. future XXXX

10. Anarchy


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  • Shantti silver member
    October 1

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    This is intense. It has a beautiful flow to it, and it definately is dark. I love the way you ended this poem.
    It almost can have a duel meaning, death can come to us in many forms.
    It's a sad depiction of a lost life
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  • Deeply sad and emotional, well written, beautiful even, but deeply sad

    Jeff


  • Eric Marsh
    July 3

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    great poem

    this is superb....yet i feel so much sadness here and acceptence of our life and death...i like the way you use nature in what i feel is an existential poem......if i'm wrong well, im sorry but that is how i read it..........keep groovin


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 2

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    Superb, heartfelt piece; excellent job with the word prompts

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