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Brushing the Stones

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Cool rush beneath the blazing sun

rippling of sensations as it warms

Splashes of pleasure have begun

'neath the blue where fish swarms

 

flow of motion changes directions

side to side, around all the bends

in the waves the trees reflections

as the coolness slowly descends

 

smooth and rippling, warming nice

the temperature rises with the day

brushing the stones once or twice

or the little toes that are in to play

 

feeling the activities of family fun

as lines and hooks cause a stir

fishnets from the banks are spun

and the impact is causing a blur

 

yet when the ripples calm down

and I can once again see the sky

it's a pleasure to see joy around

as I travel the day passing you by

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Picture: Ambro Creek , credit wiipedia search

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  • thepoetssoul
    July 21

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    Thank you so much for the entry.

    Tony


  • nickkiwick
    July 3

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    Nice job!!! I like the imagery you used here: smooth and rippling, warming nice

    the temperature rises with the day

    brushing the stones once or twice

    or the little toes that are in to play
    Good luck in the contest...also nice background!


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 3

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    Beautiful, superb take on the prompt, awesome imagery, excellent rhyme and flow

  • Beautiful rhyme and the background is such a peaceful setting for the images of the poem itself. Lovely job C


  • sheltered
    July 2

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    great title

    and great rhyme
    hardly noticeable


    fine flow and imagery
    sweet write

  • Bravo

    Light and airy, A wonderful afternoon. I felt like I was there. You're brilliant! best of luck and all my love, Rick

  • Absolutely delightful and very different for you, a poet with your talent can write anything and make it pure art

    Great stuff

    Jeff


  • Rovingone gold member
    July 2

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    Ah, what a wonderful journey. Filled with nostalgia and good times remembered. It must be a great mountain stream

    • Thank you, I was suppose to be a river lol..or something to that effect
      and just posted the bg. Thank you for your visit

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