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Another Unhappy Ending!

I'm sorry baby and I mean this from the bottom of my heart.
I know my betrayal to you is what lead us to falling apart.

I know I shouldn't have done the things I did and said.
I know what happen was my fault and now I'm better off dead!

You truly are the best thing and only one I ever wanted in my life.
But my sorrys are no good now and I can forget about you as my wife.

I feel like I fell out of heaven today, and I know I cant take it back.
She was the world to me, now you can pull my heart out and place it in that sack!

I'm left here with my thoughts and a heart full of sadness, pain and sorrow.
Nothing but regrets in me and that isn't easy to swallow!

No one else to blame for this no one else but me,
cause I was to stupid and way to blind to see.

The one I hurt the most was the only one for me.
None of that matter now because there's no way we can be.

I know I don't deserve forgiveness or even a good bye,
I can only hope one day you will and that is no lie.

I will leave you with this sorry note and for what it means I truly am.
No matter what you say to me I know I deserve it, DAMN!!

I hope you find the love and trust which you deserve to find.
I took this love for granted, when you were truly mine.

No one can help me now no one else to blame but me.
I know what I did was wrong and now I really see!


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  • black-phenoqu
    July 14
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    THJE RHYMING IN THIS IS REALLY BAD!

    SORRY BUT IT IS! THIS IS ALSO REALLY REPETITIVE. GOOD VEIW-POINT, BAD POEM


  • MaddCuppyCake
    July 13

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    this is awesome. the emotions..the sorrow, the guilt, the regret...r all shown in here. i love this
    best of luck to u


  • dominated angel25 silver member
    July 7

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    Why........

    I know just how sorry you really are,
    as a person you've come so very far.
    You truly mean every word, this I see,
    and just how much you love me.
    Your sorry, yet I still cry,
    I can't help but ask the question (why)
    Why would you doubt me the ways you had,
    why would you ask things that mad me feel bad.
    Why would you hurt me and treat me so cruel,
    he loves me I would say, now I look like the fool.
    The only one I truly let inside of me,
    had something, yet didn't even see.
    Why would you break all I gave to you,
    I'm crying now, tell me just what do I do?



  • Fallen-Thumper
    July 6

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    im crying this is really sad.
    really well written and a great job. i hope things are going ok.
    good luck and great write. thanks for entering

  • Master B
    July 6
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    I accidently deleted this comment oops!! Sorry

    blueyez commented on Another Unhappy Ending!
    this just makes me wonder if they were given a second chance would things really be any diff? You got 9 points from applause


  • The Falls Sun
    July 4
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    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(38) That is how many exclamation marks u have in your poem. They make it quite distracting. This was a good write, but honestly very similar to all the other ones in my contest. Perhaps if u put in some metaphor or rhythm to this poem it would be better, but Thanks for entering either way.
    -YounobleIvory

    • Master B
      July 4
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      Thanks

      Thank you for your critique on my poem I do think I went over board on the !!! I think at the time I wrote this I was feeling a lot alike !!!!. Other then that I wasn't trying to write something everyone else was this was straight from my heart. But its ok. Thank you again for your critique and thank you for your comment.


  • WuzGood
    July 3

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    very good piece of work, one that others can relate to. its deep and comes from the heart.
    It has a nice flow, and the rhyming was excellent!

    • Master B
      July 3
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      Thanks man I'm glad you like it. I'm still learning how to write I guess it's easier to write when you are going through the emotion I guess I need to write more when I'm feeling the emotion.. Thanks for the comment


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 3

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    I really like the expression of your regret here I hope that things turn out for the best - and that your writing will turn to happier topics this was a great read!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


    Polly
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    • Master B
      July 3

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      Thanks...

      I hope so to.. She is the only reason that I started writing.. this girl means the world to me and I hope we can work it out as well thanks for the comment!!


  • individuality gold member
    July 2

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    a wonderful show of talent here which grabs the reader and sparkles them into smiles of pleasure, admiration drips like butter from toast as i sit here and dream of poetry.

    • Master B
      July 3
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      Ty

      Thanks for the comment.. I'm new to writing poetry, I got into this because of the girl I'm dating is a very good poet... Thanks again for the comment!!

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