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firefly against a wishful sky






she envied the stars their distance,
each hand fumbling to tear them down-

an inevitable witness to all beyond her grasp



now she almost understands
why they send their brittle light to us

instead

and why every event that forgets us
is never forgotten








Author notes

First poem since May 1 - heh.

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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 4

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    "and why every event that forgets us
    is never forgotten"

    that line is such a powerful aha moment. right on.


  • charcoal
    July 29
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    beautiful title

    and a brilliant poem

  • Cat gold member
    July 3
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    love this
    can i play with it?


    • EvilKate
      July 3
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      Knock yourself out

      I have over a dozen versions around since this one (but this stays, I'm like that once something is entered)

      One version I'm musing on a lot ends:

      "and why every event that forgets us
      lays unforgotten"

      But meh. Half of one; Half of the other.

      • Cat gold member
        July 30
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        shoot i forgot to come back... sorry.. but this is wonderful and deserving..


  • Rowan gold member
    July 3

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    I was wondering where you've been, but I see you haven't lost your poetic sense. Well done kate.
    hugs


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 2

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    this is simply beautiful - love this poem. you still have your touch, that's for sure!

    ` Nicolette


  • stasis
    July 2

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    That first line is absolutely stellar.
    This entire piece is, but the first line really struck me. Very beautiful.


  • LettersFromtheSky
    July 2

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    I'm glad to see a something from you Its been forever it seems. The end reminded me a bit of a 'series of unfortunate events' something that would like to be forgotten. Thought provoking write.


  • Allyce May gold member
    July 2

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    I am so happy to see you back Brittle light - I love that. I love this, period; think I form part of the forgotten? You speak to me


  • Nickelspring gold member
    July 2

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    I love the way you sculpt your thoughts in words. I have missed you and your lovely words.
    K


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 2

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    Welcome back to the realm of madness, Scribe. We missed your words, ya know. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Write more, please.
     
     
     


  • just mercedes gold member
    July 2

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    this played well with time and space, let me see a fragile human against the majesty of stars

    good to see you writing again - write on!


    • EvilKate
      July 2
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      I'm not sure that I am writing again - yet. Been away, sorting demons. Still a ways to go

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