she envied the stars their distance,
each hand fumbling to tear them down-
an inevitable witness to all beyond her grasp
now she almost understands
why they send their brittle light to us
instead
and why every event that forgets us
is never forgotten
Author notes
First poem since May 1 - heh.
In a list
A contest entry
- favorites only; cheer me up, okay? by stasis.
1500 points, ended July 30, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
Comments
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"and why every event that forgets us
is never forgotten"
that line is such a powerful aha moment. right on.
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beautiful title
and a brilliant poem
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love this
can i play with it?
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Knock yourself out
I have over a dozen versions around since this one (but this stays, I'm like that once something is entered)
One version I'm musing on a lot ends:
"and why every event that forgets us
lays unforgotten"
But meh. Half of one; Half of the other.
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shoot i forgot to come back... sorry.. but this is wonderful and deserving..
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I was wondering where you've been, but I see you haven't lost your poetic sense. Well done kate.
hugs
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this is simply beautiful - love this poem. you still have your touch, that's for sure!
` Nicolette
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That first line is absolutely stellar.
This entire piece is, but the first line really struck me. Very beautiful.
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I'm glad to see a something from you Its been forever it seems. The end reminded me a bit of a 'series of unfortunate events' something that would like to be forgotten. Thought provoking write.
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I am so happy to see you back Brittle light - I love that. I love this, period; think I form part of the forgotten? You speak to me
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I love the way you sculpt your thoughts in words. I have missed you and your lovely words.
K
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Welcome back to the realm of madness, Scribe. 
We missed your words, ya know. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Write more, please. 
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this played well with time and space, let me see a fragile human against the majesty of stars
good to see you writing again - write on!
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I'm not sure that I am writing again - yet. Been away, sorting demons. Still a ways to go
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