A well beaten path, most choose to tread
the sheep of humanity in conformitys bed.
The answer for them, lies around the next bend
trapped in a box, they can not transcend.
Shackled and bound, in free will they self bind
not seeing the answer lies, within guarded mind.
In knowing ones self, you must nurture your heart
extending your aura, your life becomes art.
Let moral conscience guide, the life that you leed
foregoing all wants, until you have what you need.
Follow your dreams, of heart mind and soul
in healthy self esteem, you will always be whole.
In cutting new paths, new vistas you’ll view
lessons learned on this journey, are created by you.
Though you’ll stumble and fall, as you go on your way
each day you will own, when apart from the fray.
Cherrish this life, that has grown from within
where you’re going is guided, by where you have been.
Be true to youself and follow your heart
as your blazing new trails, your life becomes art.
Author notes
Prompt: a) breathe air into my lungs and art into my brain
is it my heart that's beating?
B l u e s M a n
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A contest entry
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beautiful imagery, i can just see all the pictures in my head (and no, i'm not crazy
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i loved the rhyme and flow of this, it was very light and not forced at all.
well done! thank you for entering!
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this is really pretty. the rhyme and meter dont make me cringe in pain too much, which is brilliant.
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I will say you have used assonance quite well and did a terrific job with the contest prompt. For content and poetic device you are spot on, but this round called for freeverse and your poem is well metered end line rhyme.
A good poem none the less. Thank you for your entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Thank you for your positive comment Pamela. Did I make a mistake assuming that... "Freeverse & Freewrite" are not synonymous?
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You know, I'm loving this one. Each person is a work of art, no two the same. You rhymed beautifully, and it carries a great message of knowing where we're going by judging where we've been. Any mention of art and I'm hooked, "work of art" is just the best title, ever.
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The final stanza perfectly sums up the philosophy of this poem. We owe our present to all the past , and if we are faithful to ourselves we will create something worthwhile.
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