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You held my sea at twilight.

Ellie,

I shall
never lay
without you
my love,

or your amber light above me.

where
my emerald waves
danced along the colonnades
of your twilight;

as we
tumbled

onto the silver dais
of clouds above.

There, we became one,

at twilight,
with our love.

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To Ellie.

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  • Everlasting Ellen
    July 2

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    Wow, this was a brilliant write, it flowed beautifully and was well written!! I loved the images the poetry creates. So overall, yeah... I loved it, great write and thanks for entering


  • Billy Badass
    July 2

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    Love it! A sweet and deep poem, extremely well written, my Ellie is bright and warm and totally essential to my survival Thanks for entering!