Maybe his shirt is wrinkled
And he doesn't have a butt.
His toolbelt dips past pantline
To reveal the bottom rut,
But his tongue is never silver
And he never tells her lies.
Plus that touch of a beer belly
Can't conceal his loving eyes.
He's the father. He's the husband
And he's just a small town boy.
In a city full of slickers
There are those he would annoy.
Sometimes he is a redneck
And sometimes the collar's blue,
But he just might be a banker
Or a rebel with a clue.
He may not be a cusser, but
He's probably not a saint.
The three piece might be dusty
As are all the things he ain't.
What he is might fool her
As her lips break into smiles
Because she knows he's genuine
Beyond the trends and styles.
Now, this girl ain't no expert,
But she knows what's worth a like
And she digs a little deeper
Than the magic and the might.
With biceps small or bulging
His heart is big and true
So she wouldn't trade a second
From the moment that she knew.
A contest entry
- Thank you, Carolyn by Sonja.
5000 points, ended July 17, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Reader interpretation and critical comment welcomed
Comments
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Brovo!
I love the character description seen from a girl's point of view.
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Great character study of the special traits that make an honest sincere man so precious. When we look past the window dressing and see the essence of an individual we are often disappointed but a genuine person shines like a diamond in a pile of stones. Your point is made and well expressed, write on dear poet!
Dennis
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This is a great write ...
and I got a chuckle from it, which is rather rare nowadays.
Good luck in the contest.
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How different and delightful! And so true. I have one of those men..not quite this extreme. LOL
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With your words you put a big smile to my face. Thank you for this great entry. I like its rhythm very much. I really enjoyed it.
~Sonja~
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This is terrific. I so the lyrics. Your penned facts with this one. Good luck in the contest.
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How the truth is spoken in the simple words, there is no need for fancy verse nor elegant discourse when one speaks of what is truly in the heart of a loving and caring person.
I like it, I like it so!
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