Her likeness hung in the black gallery
Holding human hearts in her hands
Where their bloods still warm
In the moment of death, decaying
She took their souls
As was foretold
And the painting was forgotten
As she held the human hearts to her breast
In times of delusion
Her eyes follow thee
As you run and hide for cover
But your souls no longer free
Held spellbound you do her bidding
Coming closer to where hands are outstretched
Too late to scream as your hearts pulled from your chest
Eyes opened wide in horror as she devours bloods release
Now in the dungeons of despair
A portrait of countess bathory
Hangs below from where she’s buried
As her corpse is dangling free
From the rope you hear her gurgles
The sacrificed virgins take part in her demise
Her still warm blood giving them eternal life
In her moment of death they were free
As was foretold
A contest entry
- D - A - R - K by skilter.
877 points, ended September 13, 101 entries
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Vivid
Very dark and morbid, with good full circle with "As was foretold". Beautiful like blood on snow at night. -
great write, thank you for entering!
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Mommy I loved this great job and I love you and your work
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again wonderful
dark, creepy, wonderful yes great... Nyte
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I liked the first stanza in this. Very good. I like the title as well.
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their bloods > their blood is or just blood
your souls > soul is
Usually don't say souls unless you are speaking of more then one soul
hearts > heart is
Sorry about that. ^
A wonderful poem really, very dark and chilling with beautiful imagery.
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lol I am talking about more then one soul thats why I have Souls written. Not sure where the heart is comes into it, but its all good!. Thank you glad you liked it
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great piece ^_^ i enjoyed it very much
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a powerful dark write with lots of imagery.... a really good write. look forward to reading more of your work.
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thank you
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'In her moment of death they were free
As was foretold'
I loved this ending. A very powerful write.
thanks for sharing.
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Dark and riveting Nice write!
"Her likeness hung in the black gallery
Holding human hearts in her hands
Where their bloods still warm
In the moment of death, decaying
She took their souls
As was foretold
And the painting was forgotten
As she held the human hearts to her breast"
-- Awesome visuals here!! -
what an epic adventure! you create a world full of mystery and fantasy all rolled in one. great job! thanks for sharing. keep up the great work...
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this write
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Amazing imagination
This really made me think, I love the twiated side and the virgins released by her damnation
really did enjopy thanks for sharing -
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Glad you liked it
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Powerful, dark write. I love your dark writes. Always has such powerful imagery. You're one of my favorite writers at AP who can write great dark poetry. Thanks for sharing and happy fourth of July.
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Happy fourth of july to you too. Glad you liked this write
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I love writes about dark powerful women!!! woot woot
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oh me too glad you liked it.
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Sounds familiar
Awww, Elizabeth, how I remember the days!!!
This was great, very well done on the visuals.
Hugs and bites,
vampi
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Aye it is about Elizabeth Bathory, well the last bit anyway lol. I think your the only one who figured it out lol. Glad you liked it.
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dang me for admitin this but im agreein with Rejected here that I missed the deeper meaning to this write. mostly because my brain is scrambled like eggs sunny side up in the morning
anyways love the darkness to the piece and enjoyed the fele to the poem as well. your frightful images painted through out the poem was really quite a nightmare to behold. anyways a wonderful write though all round and keep up the nice work as always 
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kudos to you's nyte.. love your stuff as always, the darkness it seeps is a comfort to me... awsome work from an awsome gal..
*viewed and approved by me*
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Glad you liked this write Hollow. its amazing what Inspiration from songs can do to get your poetry moving. I wonder if you can guess what band I got the song from...
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This is kickass nytey. It's fucking dark as shit too. Though i sense some hidden meaning I can't quite decipher. Or I'm just way off. lol. Great Job though. Kudos!
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