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Afternoon thoughts

The thing is they take off
on their own, shadowy something-s
difficult to tell apart. Melancholy sailing
around the lagoon - it's really the lake
I see every day - surprises,
whispers unwhispered, so much unsaid.
Self is what I have to offer the sun:
a feather, a semi-colon
transformed into a comma
before disappearing. If I speak
my voice echoes through a narrow
tunnel that leads to starry horizons.
Where are my words? 
A pathway lined by shrubs and wild plants.
Some afternoons are more abstract than others.
They flow away and back
into a grasp of time stopping.






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  • neurosine gold member
    July 3

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    We so often pine for a better here and now, often missing, not only unappreciative of, but losing the here and now in search of its mystical brother...
    The dog and the bone and the river.....


  • melancholy is like sailing
    back and forth between what ifs
    imagining a small change there
    a different smile here
    remembering the same red apple
    on the same white china plate
    unbitten