The warmth of the sun
The sweat on my back
And I thrash my tail
As the harsh whips crack
To feed their children
To bring in their pay
To use up my strength
Till the predestined day
[horse]
A contest entry
- A Bat as a Bat by demon bunny90.
715 points, ended July 2, 8 entries
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Very good.
Nice poem, it's quite good.
But not what I'm looking for in my contest.
Sorry. -
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that's okay. :] thanks <3
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very well written with lots of intensity, but not quite what I'm looking for it's a bit humanistic.
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You're so intense when you write!
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