Existing in pallid parallels,
cascades of new colors
illuminates heart’s distance
with destiny’s stroke
altering lonely winds
softly, sanity floats
amidst billowing fields
of lost syllables
as parched lips press
bestowing a final kiss good-bye…
wishing you were here~
Author notes
Prompt: the above picture http://villesgodgirl.deviantart.com/art/how-can-i-give-anymore-126465588 or the title of the picture ~ how can I give anymore
brevity, metaphor and imagination are the key
In a list
A contest entry
- picture/title prompt ~ how can I give anymore by AutumnGypsy.
700 points, ended July 15, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Usually i find anything other than rhyme hard to read and enjoy On occasions i come upon a piece that is not of that form and really enjoy it That is the case with this piece,One manages(through your words) to get inside the mind of the speaker and feel the ache and pain buried within
Excellent
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Good day to you Legend! Thank you for such a lovely compliment on my poem as it is always such a pleasure to hear from you!!!!
Thank you for the smiles!!
Linda
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This is stunning, how I can imagine being in her position. I so enjoyed this piece. Well done and best to you in the contest
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This is just so beautiful. Sad and softly penned. Best wishes with this
Gaylene
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So sadly gorgeous
I love this. Such emotion and soft sweetly expressed sentiment
Amazing as always BFF
Love ya
Lynda
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a sad picture painted, written with your softness always...good luck
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Well-crafted with feelings.
Good luck in the contest, my friend.
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Beautiful weaving sis, love the imagery in your poetic verse. Thanks for sharing you, and keep on letting that light of love shine forevermore~
Love brother Timothy
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Love the alliteration that pulls you in and the softness behind the message of loneliness portrayed in your final line.
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beautiful
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