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I'll be the ground, that you scatter on.

Why don't you just through with all of your thoughts?

Take ahold of your razorblade, and press hard onto your jumping veins.

You always walked around screaming that no one cared, but baby please just get over it.

I was there to hold your hand, when your father and mother gave up on you.

But you couldn't see that, of course I am the real one who no one cares about.

&And yet nothing can ever bring me down.

 

Don't like  blood?

Tie a brick to your foot, then toss the brick into water.

Slowly you'll sick down to the bottom of the old river.

No one will find you until your face has decomposed completely.

By then no one will ever no who exactly you are anyway.

 

Don't like water?

Down a couple hundred pills, with a small glass of any liquid.

Maybe wine or beer you'll never get to drink them if you die young anyways.

Don't leave a note, make it look like a accident.

Baby, I'm not sure if you have the guts to do any of it.

 

Scared that your mom will be the first to find you?

Grab a rope, and climb the tallest tree in the park.

Make sure the limb is sturdy enough to hold you,

Don't want you to break those pretty hips.

Then slip off of it

 

You don't like any of my ideas?

Go to the highest building, and lightly scanned down.

Look at all of the crossing people, going from store to store.

Have you ever wanted to know how it was to fly?

Come on boy why dont you give it a try?

 

Place both feet over the building, let them hang for awhile.

Then jump, the once grey ground will be painted red.

You'll be just another death in the city,

They'll line your body with chalk, no one will miss you.

 

Besides me, thats how it would be like if i didnt care.

Never say that i dont care, when you havent been there once in your life.

I've always cared, best friends forever

 

 

 

Author notes

haha this is crap!

It Seems They Have Found Another C u r e For B/r/o/k/e/n Hearts &And Feeling Insecure.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • baby this is amazing! i love it just like everythig else you write. lol [and yes i want to know what it feels like to fly...]

  • Hey. I really like this sweetie! There are few errors here and there but it's totally worth the read. Maybe revise and get even angrier? Deathly. I'm absolutley adoring it! <333

    Amazing write as always!

  • This is NOT CRAP. I think you have a great opportunity to become the person in the situation here. Like for instance...say i'm the person who likes the water...really try to think about the person with the hand full of pills...and write from their point of view..it always makes it stronger. I love how you kept asking the questions...does anyone like blood, does anyone like water...but you stopped and that kind of made me sad...I think you should continue like does anyone like flying for that one and something else for the other..but this is just my opinion.

    you did a really neat job of thinking this poem out.

    See you are a good writer too..and I couldn't have wrote this.

    • Your opinion matters, i dont know if i will to that to this poem though, maybe for my next write i shall change it around a bit.

      You could of wrote this, if you put your heart to it.

  • Not crap!
    I love it!
    And I love you Shelleh.

  • I liked this (:

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