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A Horrible Experience- A True Story

First, he was my friend,
He was a type of friend, I wouldn't recommend,
I would never forget that beautiful day that was ruined at School Ten,
I don't know what he was thinking,
He probably thought that being friends with a girl meant for us to unwillingly have sex,
In school, at recess he was always jealous because I often hung out with my other male friends,
Then, he would carry my books and walk me home from school,
I thought he was my friend, but in reality he was really a fool,
Our friendship was blind,
The whole time, I couldn't read between the lines,
He thought everything was just fine,
I was sitting out in School Ten's playground, waiting for the dumb thing he was going to say,
Instead he said let's go in the nearest alley way,
I rejected that,
Then he sugested that we go in the back of a trailer,
He told me that we needed to talk,
I gave in, thinking that he really wanted to talk,
When we went behind the trailer, he touched and caressed my body,
After that, I wanted to be left alone and decided to take a walk,
As I tried to walk away, he pull me, trying to give me a kiss,
I tried to throw a punch and missed,
As he zipped down his pants and tried to seduce me,
I screamed and hollared, but no one bothered to figure out why,
The school bell rang for me to go to my next class, tears rolled down from my eyes and I started to cry,
Oh my, oh my, look at what he has done,
Being his friend was not fun,
When he sexually molested me, I felt like I was ripped in half like a piece of paper, and crumbled all at once.

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    August 4
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    i hope you could get help eventually, that young man should be skinned alive for what he had done
    thank you for entering

  • Macsword
    August 1

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    This write could be expanded

    as an object lesson. It is an important message for younger girls to know. Tragically this happens too often. Good write poet, but consider expanding this in a more story like fashion.

    I do appreciate your entry and I hope you told your dad when that happened then I hope your dad kicked the little creep into the next county...


  • e m i l y
    July 26
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    Your story kills me, but I can only hope you don't feel like a victim anymore and more of a survivor, if that's the right word.

    But since no one has really commented on the actual poetry or structure itself...
    I think it was very raw and you could use more metaphors and poetic language.
    And some of the things, I don't mean put it into detail, I don't think anyone would
    ever ask that of you, but I mean it could be a little less confusing.

    Nevertheless, thank you for entering and best of luck,

    e m i l y

  • saz 09
    July 26

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    i hate stories like this i can relate to them, i was sexually assaulted twice. once by a single man and then the second time it was a group of men, it really moves me. other than the story behind this i do think it was well written and alot of emotion behind every line.


  • orangepeeling
    July 23

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    so sad , it broke my heart even if i don't know you . no one deserves this , i'm sorry this broke my heart . but besides being so sad it was a great write. good job , welcome to the finalist list : ) .

    thanks for entering & good luck .
    - lanii


  • Antebellum
    July 19
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    so sad.
    I hate hearing about this kind of stuff..I can relate.
    No one deserves this.

    thanks for entering.


  • forbidden-colour
    July 14

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    I am, on behalf of everyone who will read this, sorry for your experiances.
    Thank you for entering.
    Sophie


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 12

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    A lot of raw emotions have been shared here
    With a story of which many should read

    Thank you and best wishes
    Julie

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 11
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    Woah. this was a good poem! Very sincere with alot of good emotions. I"m sorry that this happened to you. this shouldn't have happened. I'd beat the crap out of him if I found him. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • Antebellum
    July 10

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    When he sexually molested me, I felt like I was ripped in half like a piece of paper, and crumbled all at once. '


    wow this is sad. Im sorry you expierenced this.
    thanks for entering, good luck


  • Suteishiijein
    July 7
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    sorry you had to experience this, no-oe should ever experience this.... hugz

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 7
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    WOAH. this was really good. I'm sorry that this happened to you. that guy is an ass. If i could, I'd get rid of him in an instant. NO ONE has the right to do something like that. NEVER. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • Ami
    July 6

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    wow I'm sorry this happened :/ You wrote it out awesome though had a great flow to it sad but great write

    Thank you so much for entering my contest
    And good luck!

    -♥Amy♥


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 3

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    Sweetie, I've been there, been through that before. A s s h o l e s like that , us girls dont need. /:



    -Shellz


    • Ashaunti
      July 3
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      thank you for the advice but we haven't seen each other in years. I wrote this poem a few months ago when I ran into him a the grocery store.


  • earthlover0915
    July 2
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    sadly i understand the t-t-t-trickery of these "boys"
    i thought he was my cousin
    And really did want to p-p-p-play a game
    with mee and my l-l-l-little sister....but it was only fun for him
    now i dont care about what he did to me
    but my little sister kills me


  • DeathisSweet
    July 1
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    .... this is ssomething i understand 100%... its a great poem

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