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Choking on the Melody

Choking on the melody,
thats how i sing,
notes barely come out,
but never seem to ring.

The verses always work,
the beat is correct.
But when the melody comes,
my voice is a defect.

Choking out the melody,
isn't very fun.
When people listen to my sound,
they will start to run.

Some days I think
I should never sing.
I'm sure you would agree,
my voice will never make a ding
on that melody.

Author notes

I don't acually sing like that! lol! Much better, (i got a 6 word solo in choir whooO!!! )

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  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    July 8

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    Hahaha that's amazing and hilarious piece. It's really well written the flow and the rhyme are really brilliantly done.
    I really enjoy it and believe that it's a brilliant piece.
    "When people listen to my sound,
    they will start to run."
    Love those two lines very much!


  • Daxteriana
    July 5

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    this was really well written. the rhyming isn't out of the ordinary and the last stanza had a nice ring to it. choir isn't one of my things, but a six word solo?! , it must've took some work to get it! i wouldn't even be in it. that's how horrible my voice is. at least, we have something to laugh at.

    Dax

    PS-I sound like the fat woman at the end of the opera with the REALLY high-pitched voice, and I don't like it... I laugh at it all the time.


  • Tallullah
    July 5

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    Aww, glad to read you don't really sing this way!

    "But when the melody comes,
    my voice is a defect."

    That's my favourite part. Don't you just hate it when everything's all great and dandy, and then when you join in it ruins it?

    Heheh :}

  • monkey3243
    July 2

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    wow! really good! i love it! and good luck in the choir


    stay strong
    and rock on
    or sing on what ever you wanna do
    ~peace