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Venus Forum #5



That's me, the brightly painted yellow pencil.
Packed in a rigid cardboard box with eleven others just the same.
Break open my cellophane world,
Shapen and expose my dark soft core.
Use me, with care

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  • CavalierEternal
    July 30

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    yes welcome, what a fascinating poem. I'm finding myself to be quite a fan of your style. Again this is very simple yet it says so much. Makes me think that I have been taking my pencils for granted. very good


  • rbruce gold member
    July 16

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    Unusual analagy and very well thought out. I love the last two lines. Everyone should note, 'use me, with care.' Welcome the Allpoetry, enjoy yourself.

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    July 10
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    Love where you when with it, excellent!


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 1

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    I like the originality of this poem you have used really good imagery too well done!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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