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In Dreams

I close my eyes
relax into the sky,
Just letting
the quiet rhythms
of this world,
rock me
till my dreams
merge into the clouds
and I float away
painting words into the sky,

As I rise above
the beauty
that I can see
in every flower,
the rainbows in  their summer petals
tickle my senses
with the golden scents
of sunlight, 
While I lie here
lazily drifting
through the realms
of midnight,
Till I awaken
refreshed,
as I slowly float down
into the new morns
dawning hour

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  • Desire gold member
    July 5

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: In Dreams
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
    Woven Strengths: While reading I kept seeing a feather floating-
    just floating in the light breeze and into a palm I was also seeing images of a Woman with eyes closed and strange as it may sound - but reference to Willy Wonka however with this- image of Gene Wilder and the quote he made in the movie- *We* are the music makers... and *we* are the dreamers of dreams. Reference to: *painting words*- I am shown a hand- and appears as if coming from the Heavens- but a hand and reference to canvas- like the sky the canvas- also notation of energy- Your energy paints the sky- what You send out-
    comes back type of reference I am being shown a carousel- whether Metaphor or literal- but seeing this carousel- going round and round
    Wild as it may appear- I am shown reference to:
    Ken doll- but notation of: He is no Ken doll- whether Metaphor or literal-
    Love the direction You took with this prompt
    Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    till my dreams
    merge into the clouds
    and I float away
    painting words into the sky,
    Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Rose-Quartz
    July 2
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    Hi maralisa, Thankyou for your very kind comments on my poem, your words always give me a real boost Take care of yourself. With love& my very best wishes from Rose xxx for you x


  • maralisa silver member
    July 2

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    aw this is very beautiful I love your imagery throughout good luck inthe contest maralisa