Deathly tears brew insulin
of bitter yearnings,
travailing in an abyss of
unimaginable sufferings
A severed soul, sawn asunder
by a beloved's betrayal
in the sea of deceitfulness,
by eyes that pierce the heart
As unrequited desires fall
upon heaven's throne,
on deaf ears, silenced in
the confinement of eternity
Shadows hover in layers
of ominous foreplay,
over this kneeling silhouette,
broken in its spiritual essence
Supplications of earnest
escalate into screeching chants
of madness, under the pressures
of life's unrelenting inequities
while crimson droplets of agony
descend from forsaken eyes
of tormenting shame, within
a paradigm of absolute desperation
Author notes
8. From pleading to bleeding.
A contest entry
- Titles Galore II: the dark write challenge. by MJ Donnelly.
6000 points, ended July 17, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for the effort, I appreciate it.
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So very wonderful. It reminded me of chocolate cake. Not just the colors, the writing too. This was a divine mixture of rythem and rhyme that I would read again...can't wait to read the rest of your work.
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very good, well worded, dark, forboding. sends chills down your spine. watch out for those chants of madness, they will drive you mad. my best to you in the contest. i like the word crimson aspecially when it describes droplets of agony.
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Wow, at last, a poem rightfully there for comment. Let me tell you now, this is good. Not only do you use lovely language, but it fits in very well with the subject matter. You have every conceivable confinement, and that takes some beating to say the least. The spiritual elegance is paramount in this piece. We shall have to collaborate one day. Your intelligence is here for all to see.
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a good poem, not sure i would have used crimson in there, but what do i know lol love, it creates madness a lot of the time yes.
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