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Argumentum Sexuality

In older days advertisements targeted a general populace by invoking human love and compassion while selling their products. Commercials and media messages often included every aspect of society--mothers, doctors, nurses, fathers, children, and adolescents. However lately all forms of media (in particular how the sexes views each other) is targeting adolescents by using gender-specific sexuality to invoke continued interest. By using misleading enticement of the opposite sex, the woman is viewed as desirous sexual beings, less dominate sex, and easily subdued by ways of violence and/or seductions of sorts.

 

International fashion moguls, particularly such as Dolce&Gabbana have faced much controversary after consumers complained of one of their advertisements in which a man subdues a woman by her wrists in a sexual manner. Spain's Labour and Social Affairs Ministry branded the campaign as illegal and humiliating to women, stating the woman's body position had nothing to do with the product they were selling. Dolce&Gabbana have had to pull ads multiple times because it offended and/or contained questionable creative license.

 

In most media outlets women are portrayed in a disgustingly sexual manner especially in music videos of rappers and rockers in particular. Women are viewed for their assets, seemingly proudly becoming nearly (and in some cases completely) nude, because being portrayed in a sexual and enticing manner makes them desirous to the opposite sex. Rappers boast of all the many women they have sexually dominated and rockers tell of their sexual escapades.

 

(i.e. Lil Wayne's Alphabet B******:

Well the A is for Ashley

she always ask for me to take it out her p****

put it right in her a** and the

B is for Brittany she bright in the class and

she be hatin on Ashley 'cause she tight in the a**

 

and Hinder's Room 21:

Wanna know what happened next

Take a wild guess

I stumbled up the stairs

To room 21

I walked in and saw her on the bed

There was nothing to be said

When we were done

She said she loved the taste of my oh oh oh)

 

If a woman is not being praised by a high sexual prowess then she is referred to in a derogatory manner, especially if she has respect enough for herself and her body to not put herself on display. However the way women are being displayed is completely unrealistic, as is their body type. The average woman is 5' 4", weighs 145 lbs., and wears between a size 11-14. Her measurements are approximately 36"/30"/41". If Barbie were a real person, she would be 6' 0", weigh 100 lbs., and wear a size 4. Her measurements would be 39"/19"/33". The average's woman waist is 34" so the average dress size is 10-14 ranging to 156 pounds, while video vixens and the women most media coins as the "average woman is 100-120 pounds". Even the barbies have not been spared of the maximizing of slenderizing woman.

 

Sexuality and sensuality, as it has always been seen in both lights and nearly as one. A method used in art once a tasteful thing now used by the web and media as a necessity. Women are targeted to get women to buy their products for their beauty appeal, glamour, and security. In reality, in her pursuit for approval from the opposite sex she advertises herself as insecure, in need of an outside factor to make her feel like a woman and her need to be wanted. By the process of pathos, arousing emotions in both males and females, the artist/company receives interest to from both sexes.

 

Others may see these things as creative license, promoting one's product in an appealing manner to catch the attention of consumers. Others may see it as women's fault for encouraging it, and allowing themselves to be portrayed in that manner. And others may simply say it is marketing a woman's want to be desirous and feminine. The latter can be done in other ways. Creative license is the ability to market things in a tasteful manner. Put a woman in a flattering and yet conservative dress or powersuit depending on what is being marketed to show the sensuality, then capture her alone, promoting femininity, independence, inner strength and beauty. It targets women in a positive light, giving back the general woman's esteem and respect and men will view women as beautiful in their confidence, success, determined, and yet gentle nature.

 

We must cut out the tasteless and unrefined, the sexuality and unrealistic approaches, and get back to the root of things. As women we must rise up and say: Stop. That is not us and we will not be viewed in this light. As men, we must rise up and say: Stop. Our women are not this way and will not be viewed in this light. As mothers and fathers we must rise up and say: Stop. Our daughters have not been taught to be respected for her sex. We will teach her self-respect. As a society, we must rise up and say: Stop. Our society is not a sexual mass that respect only sex, sexuality, and its pursuit like animals. We must cultivate the minds of the younger generation and teach the young women of this society that they are more than their legs and thighs and hips. We must teach them they have the blood of strong women who have suffered in ways unimaginable so they may have to right to be opinionated and independent. We must tell them their mother’s mother’s was Elizabeth Cady Stanton and she is woman, made from man to stand next to him, not below him. We must tell them of Maria Montessori, an educator, a philosopher and what she has done for woman. We must tell them what they can do as a woman.

 

It is the fault of all of us, those who condone the continued medium of advertisement: sex sells. We have seen it increasingly in recent generations. Companies and consumers must remember the products don't make a person, the person makes the product. Learn to compliment both men and woman and show them in a positive and flattering light. Being more realistic if not truthful in one's presentation will give the artist/company more credibility without them losing profits but most importantly a healthy respect for both sexes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Topic 10
Intro/Opening Argument 10
Supporting Details/Persuasive Body 10
Closing Argument/Conclusion 10
Figures of Persuasion: Logos/Ethos/Pathos 10
Balance of Creativity and Credibility 10
Essay Structure/Format 10
Overall Argumentive Focus 10
Potency of Appeals (ethical, cultural, sensory etc...) 10
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation 5
Overall Opinion 5

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  • unraveled
    July 6

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    92

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    By the way, you're having some sort of problem- tags are showing up where you are supposed to have line breaks, at least on my screen.

    I don't have much to say, while this didn't particularly appeal to me, it is well written, and I particularly liked the 'As ___ we must say stop' repetition.

    -Cassidy


  • And Hyetal
    July 5

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    Topic 10/10
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    Total: 96

    Wonderful topic, and I have to agree with everything Tyler said.

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    July 3

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    You picked a topic that I love and I could probably comment with persuasive essays both agreeing and disagreeing... but I won't (I actually had to stop myself and delete 4 paragraphs here ).

    The bare minimum of what I was going to put here is that advertising is a very complex art, but it is an art that cannot exist without revenue. As long as people buy an image, as long as they are shopping for sex appeal, these things will be in ads in one form or another.

    My theory is that the only way it will ever stop is if the general public is made aware that they are being victimized and targeted by advertisimg campaigns because they are vulnerable. I think if people had a tiny inkling as to how much strategy and money went into securing their money and opinions, they might just be creeped out. I know I am.

    Anyway, I already rambled on too much

    s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

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  • trista gold member
    July 3

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    While I agree with many of your points, it's hard to know what each of us can/could actually do to change the way women are perceived. Barbie will always be Barbie, and I can't imagine her modeled as a 5'4", 145 lb woman. This was, overall, nicely put together though, and sheds a lot of light on things I don't often think about. Nice job, and best of luck to you in the competition!

    ~J.

  • 96

    I'm going to take it paragraph by paragraph.

    Paragraph One:
    "In older days advertisements targeted a general populace by invoking human love and compassion while selling their products. Commercials and media messages often included every aspect of society--mothers, doctors, nurses, fathers, children, and adolescents. However lately all forms of media (in particular how the sexes views each other) is targeting adolescents by using gender-specific sexuality to invoke continued interest. By using misleading enticement of the opposite sex, the woman is viewed as desirous sexual beings, less dominate sex, and easily subdued by ways of violence and/or seductions of sorts."

    -"the sexes views" - "views" should be "view"
    -"By using misleading...seductions of sorts" - I thought that was a good thesis statement. So I have to disagree with Christi, because your thesis statement set the tone for the rest of the essay, and it was (in my opinion) persuasive.
    Overall this was a great start.

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    Paragraph Two: Great.

    -

    Paragraph Three:
    "Women are viewed for their assets, seemingly proudly becoming nearly (and in some cases completely) nude, because being portrayed in a sexual and enticing manner makes them desirous to the opposite sex."
    -"seemingly proudly becoming nearly" - made it sound a bit jumbled. Even worse, the paranthesis made it even more distracting. It just didn't flow. Maybe take out a word or two. Suggestion: "at times proudly stripping themselves (almost) naked." -- or something...something that makes it flow better.
    With that set aside, I like the content here. And the examples that followed were great.

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    Paragraph Four:
    "If a woman is not being praised by a high sexual prowess then she is referred to in a derogatory manner, especially if she has respect enough for herself and her body to not put herself on display."
    -"respect enough for herself" -- i'd suggest "enough respect for herself".

    "However the way women are being displayed is completely unrealistic, as is their body type. The average woman is 5' 4", weighs 145 lbs., and wears between a size 11-14. Her measurements are approximately 36"/30"/41". If Barbie were a real person, she would be 6' 0", weigh 100 lbs., and wear a size 4. Her measurements would be 39"/19"/33".
    -solid information and support for your argument.

    "The average's woman waist is 34" so the average dress size is 10-14 ranging to 156 pounds, while video vixens and the women most media coins as the "average woman is 100-120 pounds".
    -in the beginning, "average's woman" -- maybe "woman's average"?

    -"the women most media coins as the 'average woman is 100-120 pounds.'" - i didn't like "most media" - how about "most of the media" or "most medias"?

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    Paragraph Five:

    "Sexuality and sensuality, as it has always been seen in both lights and nearly as one. A method used in art once a tasteful thing now used by the web and media as a necessity."
    -the fragment in the beginning can be fixed by maybe writing it as "Sexuality and sensuality have always been seen in both lights and nearly as one; a method used in art - once a tasteful thing - now used by the web and media as a necessity."

    Pargraph Six - The End, fantastic.


    In the last few paragraphs, I could feel the passion in your writing, and that is what gave your argument more conviction, more power. I thought you did an awesome job.

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    Topic 10/10
    Intro/Opening Argument 10/10
    Supporting Details/Persuasive Body 10/10
    Closing Argument/Conclusion 10/10
    Figures of Persuasion: Logos/Ethos/Pathos 10/10
    Balance of Creativity and Credibility 9/10
    Essay Structure/Format 10/10
    Overall Argumentive Focus 9/10
    Potency of Appeals (ethical, cultural, sensory etc...) 10/10
    Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation 3/5
    Overall Opinion 5/5

    Extra Credit - X Factor: 0/5

    Total: 96


  • aeolia
    July 1

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    I definitely agree with what you've said, and seriously, are those real songs? They are (escusez mon francais) fucking vile. I'm so glad I don't listen to the radio or follow television/pop culture.

    Maybe it's just me, but I didn't really find this persuasive; we all know women are treated like sexual objects, are marketed and marketed to, and while you had examples, you had no research [hopefully Tyler and the other judges won't require it] and, honestly, this read like every other essay I had to read in a women's studies module once. What are you trying to prove? That we should have more realistic expectations about what womanhood is and who is a strong woman? Why not give examples of real women, like Eleanor of Aquitaine and Isabella of France, to contrast with the fake, oversexualised notions in our culture?

    Just an idea. Your writing is really strong, though.

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