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Versus

The doom and gloom,
Of your hollow room,
Was put there by you,
Not the girl you knew.

The steam and heat,
That burns your feet,
And his, is your hotness,
Perhaps, to you, it's no mess.

You broke her,
You weren't what she wanted.

You broke him,
You were what he wanted.

Fantasies of grandeur,
Of your image in the mirror,
Used to be an endearing thing,
Now it only stings.

Your freedom wasn't enough,
Now, it's time for new stuff,
I guess it's more of a thriller,
When you're with the killer.

You broke her,
You weren't what she wanted.

You broke him,
You were what he wanted.

Your song is of angry pain,
Six months and not one refrain,
The world is waiting for your breath,
So, they can for once forget death.

Your song is of loneliness,
But you don't want it to depress,
So, in the last verse, you find,
A man you think will treat you fine.

You broke her,
You weren't what she wanted.

You broke him,
You were what he wanted.

It was not an epic romance,
It's nice to ask to dance,
But her queen size bed,
Is where you were defeated.

It's time for auld lang syne,
I hope it's on your mind,
Don't forget from where you came,
And where you got that name.

You broke her,
You weren't what she wanted.

You broke him,
You were what he wanted.

To forget, forgetting, forgot it all,
Life's been tough after the fall,
But I think we all need to do some growing up,
Or we'll always be stuck in this rut.

You broke her,
You weren't what she wanted,
She should get over it,
You cared for her like no one else,
You did so much for her,
But you can't make her,
See you the same way.

You broke him,
You were what he wanted,
He should get over it,
Time has passed and empty pigheaded threats,
Make people look so stupid,
He just needs some time,
Away from you, but also to grow.

To forget, forgetting, forgot it all,
Life's been tough after the fall,
But I think we all need to do some growing up,
Or we'll always be stuck in this rut.

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  • Evolutionary
    September 1

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    The flow is off, a couple of the rhymes are slightly ehh, but the message is good. I like the clear platforms you put the opposing sides on... how there really are no sides, no villain and no victim, how they are both broken in their own way, by each other... it's a good point that sometimes people have difficulty seeing when observing a broken relationship