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Refraction

The water is a dismal gray, but the dagger on top of the lily pad, gleams red.

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"no reflection"

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  • fortyninereasons gold member
    July 3
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    A dark piece you have penned. The imagery is excellent
    Juls

  • Macsword
    July 2
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    Good piece...

    This is dark, but in tune with a body of water that does nor "reflect" anything.


  • awannabepoet
    July 2

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    Interesting play on thoughts here, the two colors mix well don't they gray and red. Where there is confusion in one there is fire and passion in the other.

    Much lies beneath the surface that only the dagger could reminisce while lying patiently on the soft lily pad on gray waters.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    July 2

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    Oh this is very creative and
    full of vibrance. i really like
    where you directed this prompt.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • chasingtheday gold member
    July 2

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    this is a great poem, it waltzes around shades, the language is wild and creative, it is a pleasure to read.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 1
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    Oh my...
    Which one is this for?
    I like it.

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