Regret
you leaving?
Bedrock and blame quaked
from faltered foundations.
Unstable supports bent metal;
spent time went down.
Drywalls surrounded heart carcasses
and suffocated chances
when cities crumbled; you left
me without warning, without goodbye
-Twisted-
Goodbye without warning, without me
left you crumbled cities when
chances suffocated and
carcasses’ heart surrounded drywalls.
Down went time spent;
metal bent supports, unstable
foundations faltered from
quaked blame and bedrock,
leaving you
regret.
Author notes
sideways hourglass
Harder: Palindrome http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/palindrome.html
Easier: Interlocking Rubáiyát http://allpoetry.com/list/49330-Interlocking-Rub-iy-t
I chose "harder".
I'll post form details here in a few minutes.
Comments
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This poem is a wonderful accomplishment. It is so difficult to write a cohesive poem with great imagery that reads well in one direction. To do it in reverse is impressive. I particularly liked how the beginning and ending three words changed their meaning so well at opposite ends of this poem. Congratulations on your success in this most difficult form. Peace, Liz
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I've always found the Palindrome form creates a poem that can be very stilted to read .. but for the most part you have managed to create one that has a good flow, personally I felt the first half flowed better than the second, but the images of the second came over better than the first .. overall I feel you have penned a very good Palindrome.
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oh wow.
this is incredible. I would never be able to do a palindrome.. that's just so insane.
and it still sounds so good! I like the second part of it better, it seemed for flowy to me.. but still, wow. I like the imagery too
goodluck
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Thanks.
I'm not confident with it at all! =/
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