Here alone; the quiet seems deafening
my only thoughts are of you......
lost in an hyptnotic fascination, while
feeling as if my life had turned upside down.
Peering deeply into the windows of my mind
my soul feeling parched, void of its paradise
my dreams all mangled, destroyed by pain
what had happened along the path of life?
Where has the eternal strength of love gone
why is it so many times sorrow remains
reaching deep inside to the very core of me
I know there must be more to love in life....
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lost in an hyptnotic fascination, while
feeling as if my life had turned upside down.
I think that this was my favorite part. I love your vacabulary especially in all of the poem but right here was very good. I like the way you do it...big hard to understand words (well, easy to get but all together not sop much) followed by a very simple, straightforward part. It's really pulls the reader in and I liked that.
-Andi
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Very emotional, especially for such a short peice
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Very nice. Good flow and an excellent choice of words.
"Peering deeply into the windows of my mind
my soul feeling parched, void of its paradise
my dreams all mangled, destroyed by pain
what had happened along the path of life?"
This stanza really packed a punch! (for lack of better words).
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I like the way you have worded this. you seem to have a very excellent vocabulary. and I like the part about quiet being deafening. that is so very true.
nice poem! it was a pleasure to read.
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